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This poem is written from the perspective of an individual in a relationship with someone that has BPD, borderline personality disorder. It's never an easy journey being in a relationship with one. However this also is written from the soul of one that chose love above all.
For Silent Ones contest " any poem posted in 2024 not for a contest"

Time ticks away as a new dawn strokes your splitting heart, with your mood swings re-writing my emphatic poetical art. Although the fear of your demons may grip my soul I am now immune to all the personalities you can't control. I am lost without the warmth of your crystalline eyes, so let your tears implode upon me under turbulent skies. I've seen crimson and aquamarine ambers outside your tinted mists, without boundaries or limitations, I'm one who always persists. As I recognize the repetitive push and pull for the fearful, you've so impulsively strained against us with forces so powerful. I never knew there would be something sweet about a fatal kiss, but the moment I laid my eyes upon your soul's tender bliss, I knew no, amount of pressure could keep us apart. despite my mind, always on an endless loop to restart, I'll never stop trying to be by your side, despite the havoc I will understand you tried. There have been times you've named my trust an unfaithful land, yet in times of turmoil you've never forgotten the future we planned. Let me mould those wheels into emerald wrecking balls, so we can tentatively tarnish all the forgotten falls, as you swim from the flashbacks and triggers of satanic seas, my arms shall always be right in-front, just as you need them to be. Remember you'll regret loving me without maturity; You’Il insanely struggle with immense insecurity, because I will not let your imagination push me to insanity. My spirit will guide me even when you feel disorientated, as the keyholder to my chains, with you I feel liberated. I'll constantly remind you of this forevermore, When your fears overtake you like an irrational war.

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 1/20/2024 7:03:00 AM

Back with congratulations on your winner in this contest. Way to go. Sara K

Silent One

Date: 1/10/2024 11:32:00 AM

Ive had this experience and it is hard work, trust me... never knowing what will trigger them or what kind of mood they are in one day.. one minute they can take a joke, the next they want to stab you.. but you love them without conditions and you know they dont mean it, its their inner insecurities affecting them.. PAtience and understanding is the key.. Congratulations on your first place in the contest..

Speaks Volumes

Date: 1/9/2024 2:21:00 AM

This hit home so intensely Empress. Living with a partner with dementia takes a lot of effort. I can only imagine what its like to live with someone afflicted with BPD. Your Poem is so strong and determined. To be able to peer deeply through the illness and see love on the other side is an intoxicating reality. Bless you dear one/ My admiration overflows. Wen AKA S.V.

Jude Herrick

Date: 1/8/2024 7:20:00 AM

A true healing love, you have cultivated strength and an ethic of giving. Faithful warrior of being there and seeing through someone elses Polarized eyes. But to be unwavering in your strength. This is a hope that will win this battle in the end. Emotions do have their demons that want to play dressup with whatif's fearful garb.le Fresh everyday angles of your love and thoughtful ingenuity may be a fresh air that distracts from the black clouds overhead that lay low in the backdrop, cowardly.

Tom Woody

Date: 1/8/2024 6:30:00 AM

Beautiful sentiments inky. To love someone that many would consider unlovable. Staying through the tough moments, of which there are likely many. Mental illness is hard to define.it can't be so neatly diagnosed and placed in a box. In the end, we accept the person for who they are or dissociate. I like that your protagonist chose love and loyalty

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 1/7/2024 4:38:00 PM

as I read this I realized you were describing someone with perhaps bipolar disorder. How challenging it is to be in any kind of a relationship with a person who suffers from bipolar disorder or any other mental illness for that matter, hence the title 'Fatal Kiss.' Your words were mindful and compassionate and I admire those qualities in you. Well done, Ink!

Paige Hind

Date: 1/7/2024 4:00:00 PM

Yeah, I've known people with BPD. It's hard, your words made me want to try harder with them...

Anisha Dutta

Date: 1/7/2024 9:32:00 AM

You chose a very tough theme and framed So perfect . I admire . I never venture to write a long poem . The shorter it be I feel more comfortable, ‘cause neither I have patience nor holding that much vocabulary in English

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/7/2024 9:13:00 AM

My mom tolerated my schizophrenic dad for five years and had to leave him. It was the 50s and shock treatments were all they had. I saw him a few times remarried to different women and on meds, but he was just a shell of the man my mother fell in love with before his sickness came out. Some mental illnesses just can't be overcome. S tragedy for those who have it and their loved ones who try to live with it.

Ink Empress
Date: 1/7/2024 9:17:00 AM

Im so sorry dear andrea, yes i know and have seen and still see closeup, how so many struggle being with schizophrenic individuals, schizophrenia is an illness that is hard to overcome, even with medication sometimes, and you are right back in the day shock treatments were the only known treatment. This poem is not about me really, iv never been with one who has mental health issues, i do write about certain mental health illnesses that im personally familiar with due to loved ones having been through it etc, thank you so much for reading. I truly appreciate you sharing also your story . Sending you light today and always

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/7/2024 9:08:00 AM

Did you actually date this person? Or is it totally your imagination of how it would be? I loved the part about arms will always be in front of him, just as he needs them to be. I know several people , three close to me, who lived with this kind of man and loving them as much as possible. But good as they were, it was impossible for them to remain living with the effects of their person's bipolarism.

Sotto Poet

Date: 1/7/2024 8:28:00 AM

Your poem is exquisitely crafted, showcasing a captivating assortment of imagery that resonates deeply within the heart, Dear Ink. It delicately pierces through with subtle hope, evoking a sense of tender vulnerability enveloped in radiant brilliance. The fortunate person who finds solace in your presence as a confidant, friend, and soulmate is truly blessed. Your overflowing and inspired love manifests itself in such endearing ways, rendering your heart a vessel of utmost beauty and vividness.

Vijay Pandit

Date: 1/7/2024 5:59:00 AM

I never knew there would be something sweet about a fatal kiss, but the moment I laid my eyes upon your soul's tender bliss, I knew no, amount of pressure could keep us apart---that sums up brilliantly the essence of your poem for me, Ink. Splendid write, as always, my friend.

Karen Jones

Date: 1/7/2024 5:52:00 AM

What a lucky person to have you as their confidant friend soulmate etc. This is so endearing to have a heart this full and inspired of love! I love these line among many others I am lost without the warmth of your crystalline eyes, so let your tears implode upon me under turbulent skies. "

Ink Empress
Date: 1/7/2024 9:19:00 AM

Ah dear karen this poem isnt about my personal feelings but as an empath and mental health advocate i do write about mental health illnesses that i am familiar with on a certain personal level. Thank you always for your visits your comments are always so sincere

Karen Jones
Date: 1/7/2024 5:53:00 AM

Forgive me but if it wasn't for contest it should be! Great writing as usual! ;0)

Sara Kendrick

Date: 1/7/2024 4:01:00 AM

Living with someone who has a known mental illness is difficult. Living with someone who has a brain disease that manifest itself as a mental illness plus you know their brain is being destroyed a little every day is hard as well plus when you are getting older yourself knowing that your brain is not getting any younger is not easy by any means. I feel for you. Our grandson who lives with us has Huntington's Disease which is an inherited brain disease which manifest itself in any number ..

Ink Empress
Date: 1/7/2024 9:21:00 AM

Oh dear sara, i cant even imagine the stress you must be goin through , emotionally and physically it gets draining as we care and love our loved ones and as for you, in your case it’s your grandson and i can only imagine the pain and helplessness you must feel, sometimes as all we want is for them to feel better, yes iv heard of huntington disease. Alzheimers iv seen in my family too: i feel your fears and i will keep you in my thoughts and prayers always sweet sara

Sara Kendrick
Date: 1/7/2024 4:04:00 AM

of illnesses that are caused by too much dopamine. I know unless they come up with some medicine or treatment it only gets worse. I don't know how long I will be able to care for him. My husband's family has Alzheimer's Disease and I think he has it but he won't discuss it with his doctor. Sara K

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 1/7/2024 1:59:00 AM

Sounds similar to bipolar but not quite - am I right? Wonderful writing, as is usual. You're always quick to impress, oh yes. Such a impressive Ink Empress. Love to you and God bless you too. Gina

Ink Empress
Date: 1/7/2024 9:23:00 AM

Dear Gina, it is actually very similar to bipolar disorder? But this is more of a personality disorder. And can differ, although there are some similarities. Bpd is mainly based on abandonment issues and childhood trauma etc. whereas individuals with bipolar do not havr that same issue. Thank you so much for reading and leaving your feedback truly grateful

Hiya Sharma

Date: 1/7/2024 12:01:00 AM

Oh gosh! This is a spectacular piece, dear Ink.. How beautifully you've described the complexities that emerge in the relationship with a person with bpd.. I agree, most important above everything, is choosing love and choosing the one who embraces us.. Because, everything else in this world is just a ruin of materialistic deeds.. Flowing in a false rhythm, never really true, in the end..The rhymes, flow, alliteration, metaphors and descriptions of this poem are impeccable! Brilliant imagery too

Hiya Sharma
Date: 1/7/2024 12:04:00 AM

which describes the profound essence of 'fatal kiss'.. Woah, love that title too!! "I've seen crimson and aquamarine ambers outside your tinted mists", "I never knew there would be something sweet about a fatal kiss, but the moment I laid my eyes upon your soul's tender bliss" Ahh, such tender and heartwarming serenity flows in your lines, dear poetess.. I loved reading this.. Best of luck for the contest too, sending many magical wishes & light ~ :)

Lioness Onpaper

Date: 1/6/2024 11:54:00 PM

Mmmmm… the emotions in this piece… beautifully written.. I am now immune to all the personalities you can't control. awwwn… you swim from the flashbacks and triggers of satanic seas,my arms shall always be right in-front.. Tis true love!! I will not let your imagination push me to insanity... extraordinary powers with extraordinary responsibilities!! This whole piece oozes the beauty of a powerful relationship.. the cherish within each other is sooo romantic aee papi.. gorgeous weave..

The Aura Rhymes

Date: 1/6/2024 11:21:00 PM

I’m sure it’s hard to be in a relationship with someone who has borderline and you wrote it so well .