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Fat Smoker

Barely can I even breathe
(I'm always out of breath!)
Oh, my lungs of me bereaved-
I smoked them to my Death!

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Robin Davis

October 25, 2013 at 4:44 PM

Chan This is a short but powerful write and could scare a smoker into quitting immediately. LOL Nice job Your comment on my Senility poem was funny. The holes in your brain lets the old thoughts out and new in. HEE HEE Hugs

Just That Archaic Poet

October 26, 2013 at 6:55 AM

I wish I could quit. I did quit for over six months a few years ago but I missed it too much. Every time I would catch a whiff of cigarette smoke, it was like smelling a burger on a grill. I truly enjoy smoking, but I'm sure it will be the death of me lol Oh, well ;) <3

Vinayak Pratap

September 25, 2013 at 9:50 PM

can relate 2 tis 1 quite well

Just That Archaic Poet

September 26, 2013 at 7:26 AM

lol I'm glad someone relates to it; thanks for your feedback, Vin :)

Mustapha Mohammed

September 20, 2013 at 2:10 AM

I guess when you all look back now I'm sure that there are things that you've wished that you could have done differently. That's what I sense while perusing this piece Archaic. Another quality write from you that I truly enjoyed.

Just That Archaic Poet

September 20, 2013 at 6:33 PM

One of my biggest problems is that I NEVER learn my lesson. Smoking will probably kill me, but it's a vice I enjoy too much to give up right now. I'll have a different opinion when I get a terminal illness I suppose lol. Thanks for the read and review, Mustapha :)

Linda Jackson

September 18, 2013 at 10:24 PM

Black humour at its best. Best wishes Linda x

Just That Archaic Poet

September 19, 2013 at 8:53 AM

Hi, Linda. Thank you! This poem is a satirical one about myself. I am the "fat smoker" alluded to in the piece. Thanks for taking time to read and review :)

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