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Far Beyond Your Absence,My Sombre Heart Seeks

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Keith O.J. Hunt

Date: 3/29/2014 10:30:00 AM

Great write Charmaine! I think your first 2 stanzas are stronger; especially the 2nd one, but his 3rd one is clearly better ---- all in all 2 great attempts! I love this Charm, very beautiful and thoroughly interesting with the rendition theme here! Going to fave it!

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 10/13/2013 5:23:00 PM

A pleasant read on a fall eve. Each version has a different flavor, yours though perhaps not as perfect is still more you, beautiful just as you are. Light & Love

Michael Ainsley

Date: 10/8/2013 12:16:00 AM

Your title grabbed me and your poem delivered . The last line was perfect . it carried my heart over the horizon .Indeed this poem is a work of art. Thank you; Charmaine. Be good to you!

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 10/1/2013 8:25:00 AM

I love the whisper feel of your poem. It floats softly accross my heart. I liked Georgios as well but felt more connected with your less formal rendition. Outstanding work by both of you. You should be very proud of your work Charmaine.

Kash Poet

Date: 9/30/2013 7:52:00 PM

Just Beautiful Charmine.I love it!

Richard D Seal

Date: 9/30/2013 5:32:00 PM

I wouldn't worry over perfect meter Charmi, flow and emotion are the important elements, this poem has both, beautifully written. Take care, Richard

Mustapha Mohammed

Date: 9/30/2013 3:07:00 AM

Incredible that's the only word I could find for the hour.

Matthew Anish

Date: 9/21/2013 4:53:00 PM

Fine - even gorgeous work here. I hope you keep up the fine poetry and yes - we are always learning in this craft. Peace & Love Matthew Anish

Kelly Deschler

Date: 9/21/2013 4:50:00 PM

A truly romantic poem of deep devotion! Wonderful imagery throughout this great piece of poetry! There is no possible way for us to show how much we really love someone. Even words are not enough, sometimes!...I just wrote a poem with Isaiah Zerbst that is similar to this. It is titled "The Signal"...Thank you for the amazing comments, as always! :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/21/2013 12:46:00 AM

charma, this is REALLY good for your first sonnet all by your lonesome. It's so romantic. Awesome job, Sweetie.

Chris Boskovski

Date: 9/20/2013 8:55:00 PM

You said that this is your first attempt at a sonnet, yet it seems you write sonnets everyday! This is a great first attempt, very beautiful poem! I lvoe it! :) xoxo hugs and kisses all around for you my beautiful Charma!! :)

Jack Ellison

Date: 9/20/2013 7:55:00 PM

WOW! WOW! WOW! As Drake said... I AM JUST FLOORED! What a gorgeous piece of poetry my dearest sweet Charmaine!!! Love Jack xox

Poet Tacito

Date: 9/20/2013 8:27:00 AM

I am just floored by this. The sacrifices & declarations made here rock the foundations of how love thinks & feels. Spectacular job.

John Loving Iii

Date: 9/20/2013 8:26:00 AM

Hello my little mermaid. I was glad to see you read my precious piece to my beloved. You are one of those who know that it is truth and not pretend that it is made of. And when I saw your piece I selfishly decided that I inspired it. But I will say that you inspired me to write a sonnet. Shakespeare inspired me to poetry long ago. I like you will continue the tradition.

Charmaine Chircop
Date: 9/20/2013 11:03:00 AM

Us human i meant oops :)

Charmaine Chircop
Date: 9/20/2013 9:48:00 AM

Mystic Rose inspired me to write this first sonnet on my own after she asked me to collab with her in a previous sonnet..since i had never written one before..This sonnet was inspired by a past poem of mine reaching deepest oceans..but i do believe we hunan all sail in the same ship.Re your last post i know how u loved April and she is with you

Ken Carroll

Date: 9/20/2013 5:45:00 AM

Hi Charmain, A most romantic write that fulfills the reader..Thanks for visiting my work and the kind compliment.. regards, Ken

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 9/20/2013 3:53:00 AM

Oh, how inadequate vocabulary seems to be, no matter how magnificently we master it, to express the love we feel for the one and only person we love! At the end it seems doing injustice to our beloved! Magnificent poem!

Liam Mcdaid

Date: 9/19/2013 5:19:00 PM

THAT JUST BOWLED ME OVER AMAZING BEAUTIFUL AS THE HEART MISSED A BEAT THIS PIECE JUST KISSED MY SOUL THE SWEETEST WORDS I HAVE EVER LAID MY EYES ON I TIP MY HAT AND SMILE