Far Beyond Your Absence,My Sombre Heart Seeks

Great write Charmaine! I think your first 2 stanzas are stronger; especially the 2nd one, but his 3rd one is clearly better ---- all in all 2 great attempts! I love this Charm, very beautiful and thoroughly interesting with the rendition theme here! Going to fave it!

A pleasant read on a fall eve. Each version has a different flavor, yours though perhaps not as perfect is still more you, beautiful just as you are. Light & Love

Your title grabbed me and your poem delivered . The last line was perfect . it carried my heart over the horizon .Indeed this poem is a work of art. Thank you; Charmaine. Be good to you!

I love the whisper feel of your poem. It floats softly accross my heart. I liked Georgios as well but felt more connected with your less formal rendition. Outstanding work by both of you. You should be very proud of your work Charmaine.

Just Beautiful Charmine.I love it!

I wouldn't worry over perfect meter Charmi, flow and emotion are the important elements, this poem has both, beautifully written. Take care, Richard

Incredible that's the only word I could find for the hour.

Smile ~ I Don't Get It ? Why Must One Adhere As Search Unto But For Another's Cat A Gory While Spelling Thus Pouring The Depths Be Their Own Love Shall It Not Breathe, Sweet Beautiful Charma Charmaine, To Rise From These Flames Called Heart Her Claim A Stake Driven Deeply Into And What Is Life If Not A Song We Sing ? Beyound Restrain They Soar These Words Our Spirit's, This Love ~ I Am Going To Favour Your Treasure Because It Is Purely And Simply, Beautiful! ~ Love Always, John

Fine - even gorgeous work here. I hope you keep up the fine poetry and yes - we are always learning in this craft. Peace & Love Matthew Anish

A truly romantic poem of deep devotion! Wonderful imagery throughout this great piece of poetry! There is no possible way for us to show how much we really love someone. Even words are not enough, sometimes!...I just wrote a poem with Isaiah Zerbst that is similar to this. It is titled "The Signal"...Thank you for the amazing comments, as always! :)

charma, this is REALLY good for your first sonnet all by your lonesome. It's so romantic. Awesome job, Sweetie.

You said that this is your first attempt at a sonnet, yet it seems you write sonnets everyday! This is a great first attempt, very beautiful poem! I lvoe it! :) xoxo hugs and kisses all around for you my beautiful Charma!! :)

WOW! WOW! WOW! As Drake said... I AM JUST FLOORED! What a gorgeous piece of poetry my dearest sweet Charmaine!!! Love Jack xox

I am just floored by this. The sacrifices & declarations made here rock the foundations of how love thinks & feels. Spectacular job.

Hi Charmain, A most romantic write that fulfills the reader..Thanks for visiting my work and the kind compliment.. regards, Ken

Oh, how inadequate vocabulary seems to be, no matter how magnificently we master it, to express the love we feel for the one and only person we love! At the end it seems doing injustice to our beloved! Magnificent poem!

THAT JUST BOWLED ME OVER AMAZING BEAUTIFUL AS THE HEART MISSED A BEAT THIS PIECE JUST KISSED MY SOUL THE SWEETEST WORDS I HAVE EVER LAID MY EYES ON I TIP MY HAT AND SMILE