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Family Ties

THICKER THAN WATER I pushed at the open door no sound just darkness inside. Dust filtered my nostrils, a mustiness of lost years inhabited my senses. A loose floorboard creaked in the stairwell, the aroma of her Chanel provoked memories of my living hell. A tear of self-pity congealed in the dirt at my feet I switched on the light "Hello son I knew you'd be back; He's gone..." NOTE this is a repost of my original prose 2010 to illustrate there is only two real differences between prose and poetry.Visual presentation and the fact that poetry is written to read aloud.

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Date: 9/5/2021 7:23:00 AM
A very chilling write, Brian ~ masterfully done
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Brian Strand
Date: 9/6/2021 12:24:00 AM
An unusual topic Line..a one off of its genre for me
Date: 9/3/2021 1:06:00 PM
Oh! Wow! The reading of a work about abuse done in a subtle way. Enjoyed reading your work and feel the pain of the person who went through those events. Thanks for the visits to my page. Sara
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Brian Strand
Date: 9/3/2021 2:48:00 PM
Pure imagination on my part Sara,but maybe there is ..anothers story to which it may refer.
Date: 8/31/2021 6:44:00 AM
Very cool, Brian! almost sounds kind of like the sensory-image poems I cast out sometimes! felt like I was there! Love this sort of poetry!
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Brian Strand
Date: 8/31/2021 8:31:00 AM
Cheers James - difficult to reproduce- they come as a happening
Date: 8/30/2021 4:09:00 PM
This emotional snapshot of family life, offers a stirring scene. Great writing, Brian. :)
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Brian Strand
Date: 8/31/2021 1:18:00 AM
Thanks Evelyn for your comment
Date: 8/30/2021 3:06:00 PM
excellent ink Brian the imagery is superb:-) hugs jan xx
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Brian Strand
Date: 8/31/2021 12:54:00 AM
Imagist I confess to you Jan,along with ekphrasis&footle imagist is eveything to me poetic wise

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