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False Sun



first love's false flame burned way too hot and left me nothing but the want for fiery passion to remain to keep me bound in love's pleasure-pain like chasing an addiction high more and more but always just shy I find that I am in a cage I have lost this ancient war you waged so injured, I then licked my wounds to passions heat I am immune all warmth leaked out with your goodbye too frozen to fall, the tears I cry I can still feel that dizzy spin the world revolved around you then I feel so lost all just a blur I did not see the black hole you were yes, my whole world revolved ‘round you you weren't the sun that I pursue I guess I had my eyes shut tight and did not see your dark heart of night the warmth I felt upon my face was not the sun but my disgrace thank God your gone and He forgives and true love, so warm, inside me lives
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Date: 7/29/2025 4:29:00 PM
always a challenge to navigate the waters of first love. You expressed it well. Liked this poem, especially the last verse, Sara
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Crystol Woods
Date: 7/29/2025 6:09:00 PM
Tysm Sara! Xxoo
Date: 7/22/2025 8:42:00 AM
I enjoyed absolutely every part of this write! Crystol that old saying, 'you sang my truth,' girl you hit every note! Awesomeness Madame ;)
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Crystol Woods
Date: 7/23/2025 4:29:00 AM
How wonderful... not that you've felt this way lol but that I've written something you can relate to! Poetry should connect people. Thank you for telling me! Xi
Date: 7/19/2025 5:14:00 AM
enjoyed reading - congrats on your win in the contest :)
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Crystol Woods
Date: 7/19/2025 8:22:00 AM
Thanks! Xo
Date: 7/16/2025 5:47:00 PM
Loved it! She picked the wrong sun to revolve around. Perfect for the theme. Well done Crystol
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Crystol Woods
Date: 7/17/2025 10:12:00 AM
Yay!! I'm so happy you liked it! What a thrill this morning! I'm celebrating...tysm! Xo
Date: 7/14/2025 3:59:00 PM
Great poem - first love can be pretty harsh.
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Crystol Woods
Date: 7/17/2025 10:28:00 AM
Tysm! Xo
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