Nette Onclaud Poet Tanka

Fall's Departure

This long sojourn is

   prelude to fall's departure.

          On a river, clear…

             I hold blossoming jasmines 

and Mama's final ashes




Traditional Tanka for Charlotte Jade Puddifoot
5/28/2016

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Paul Callus June 24, 2016 at 3:03 PM Congratulations on this podium finish, Nette! I had no doubt this tanka would make you proud:) hugs // paul

Sandra Haight June 18, 2016 at 7:34 PM Amazing and also sorrowful imagery, Nette. Congratulations on your fine podium win. Hugs, Sandra

Charlotte Puddifoot June 18, 2016 at 4:40 PM this was very poignant and reflective, nette, how a traditional tanka should be, very lovely - i think i would have preferred a different word to 'final', and that pushed it into 3rd, but a really good tanka - congrats on your win in my contest :)

Jan Allison June 18, 2016 at 4:21 PM I really loved this one on first read congrats Nette:-) hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich May 28, 2016 at 10:03 AM wow, I think my favorite of all that I have seen so far. Now why didn't you do one with an ending like this for summer?? This is amazing.

Winged Warrior May 28, 2016 at 9:14 AM Great Tanka Nette...a winner for sure...^WW^

Jan Allison May 28, 2016 at 7:30 AM beautiful but sad imagery Nette good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus May 28, 2016 at 6:57 AM I can picture this so clearly in my mind, Nette...and I can feel the emotions, too! I love the fragrant smell of jasmines. hugs // paul

Demetrios Trifiatis May 28, 2016 at 6:55 AM Such beauty! Joy and sorrow interwoven! Superb dear, nette! hugs

Manny Paras May 28, 2016 at 5:18 AM Well woven, expressive tanka with an ending that contrasts blossoming with death! You win, woman!