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Fall's Departure

This long sojourn is prelude to fall's departure. On a river, clear… I hold blossoming jasmines and Mama's final ashes Traditional Tanka for Charlotte Jade Puddifoot 5/28/2016

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Date: 6/24/2016 3:03:00 PM
Congratulations on this podium finish, Nette! I had no doubt this tanka would make you proud:) hugs // paul
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Date: 6/18/2016 7:34:00 PM
Amazing and also sorrowful imagery, Nette. Congratulations on your fine podium win. Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 6/18/2016 4:40:00 PM
this was very poignant and reflective, nette, how a traditional tanka should be, very lovely - i think i would have preferred a different word to 'final', and that pushed it into 3rd, but a really good tanka - congrats on your win in my contest :)
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Date: 6/18/2016 4:21:00 PM
I really loved this one on first read congrats Nette:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 5/28/2016 10:03:00 AM
wow, I think my favorite of all that I have seen so far. Now why didn't you do one with an ending like this for summer?? This is amazing.
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Date: 5/28/2016 9:14:00 AM
Great Tanka Nette...a winner for sure...^WW^
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Date: 5/28/2016 7:30:00 AM
beautiful but sad imagery Nette good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 5/28/2016 6:57:00 AM
I can picture this so clearly in my mind, Nette...and I can feel the emotions, too! I love the fragrant smell of jasmines. hugs // paul
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Date: 5/28/2016 6:55:00 AM
Such beauty! Joy and sorrow interwoven! Superb dear, nette! hugs
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Date: 5/28/2016 5:18:00 AM
Well woven, expressive tanka with an ending that contrasts blossoming with death! You win, woman!
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