Falling

At first love floats like a snowflake, until it melts in your hand. Then it falls, like an Autumn leaf, eventually swept away in the breeze. Sometimes love offers mercy, like April showers to rose petals, but no rain can save from decay. Love wants to be free like a kite, flying colourfully in bright blue skies, but grey clouds ruin its flight. One day love will descend like sunset. Maybe we are born to fall - but love will always ascend again like sunrise.

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Paige Hind

Date: 12/8/2023 4:58:00 PM

I agree with the last stanza. In so many ways... wisely thought of!

David Grasby

Date: 12/7/2023 10:59:00 AM

Very well written I enjoyed very much

Yann Rolland

Date: 12/7/2023 4:19:00 AM

this is brilliant, i adore the images of the first stanzas, images to be remembered, so enjoyable writing, thanks poet

Jerry Brotherton

Date: 12/6/2023 5:54:00 PM

From start to finish, each word of this poem brings me joy. Brilliantly composed and with a romantic message. I must say, a fav for me.

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 12/6/2023 5:08:00 PM

The ups and downs of love! Lovely imagery, Silent! A fave!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/6/2023 1:36:00 PM

This is perfect size for a lovely free verse poem. I like this one very much

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 12/6/2023 12:55:00 PM

Such a lovely romantic poem.

Sotto Poet

Date: 12/6/2023 12:55:00 PM

Dear SO, Your skillfully composed poetry is unquestionably captivating, appearing to emanate from an otherworldly sphere. A profound analogy can be drawn between love and snowflakes. "Love is the water of life," said Rumi. "Drink it in with your entire being." Losing an intimate partner doesn't suggest eternal separation; love will perpetually reappear like the sun. Well crafted dear friend.

Lioness Onpaper

Date: 12/6/2023 9:48:00 AM

love floats like a snowflake,until it melts in your hand… so true brother!!! Next time um wearing a coaster on my hand !!! no rain can save from decay... amen brothaaa!! love will always ascend again like sunrise... mmm I shalll wait for the sunrise then!!! Beautifully written piece brothaa..

Ayesha Iqbal

Date: 12/6/2023 8:35:00 AM

Aww those last two lines.. such a lovely piece this is!! Loved it brother!

Heidi Sands

Date: 12/6/2023 6:46:00 AM

Love wants to be free like a kite. So true. Well written Silent One :)

Heidi Sands

Date: 12/6/2023 6:45:00 AM

Love wants to be free like a kite. So true. Well written Silent One :)

Shadow Hamilton

Date: 12/6/2023 6:34:00 AM

Lovely love poem Silent One "MAYBE we are born to fall" resounds in my mind hugs Shadow

Vijay Pandit

Date: 12/6/2023 6:25:00 AM

The ending line spells the essence of your poem. Your words ring true.

Tom Woody

Date: 12/6/2023 6:10:00 AM

Whew! I see you're in a creative mood of late and cranking 'em out. Hard to keep up but I'll try. that last line means a lot to me, since I firmly believe in a future resurrection. Losing someone we love doesn't mean forever. Someone else might have a different take but I'm good with mine. Nice write

Ink Empress

Date: 12/6/2023 6:02:00 AM

This is absolutely stunning and so well written, what a deep simile it is, to compare to love to snowflakes. Yeap. I agree its fragile and one must take care of love really, and you’ve described the butterfly phase and when butterflies die too, how beautiful it is for your to say love descends like sunsets. And wants to be free like a kite. Thats deep because kites arent really free, someone needs to let them fly free and let them explore the sky .. so i find that brilliant. Your mind, how it

Ink Empress
Date: 12/6/2023 6:03:00 AM

Works is truly impressive and leaves me in awe. And the simplicity of this poem is what i love the most, it is delicate and soft but hits strong! If that makes sense, pleasure reading you always. Fave

Jasen Ridley

Date: 12/6/2023 4:51:00 AM

Love this one Silent One good job. Very insightful