Fallen Sand Castles

Hope built upon the sand
as castles before the waves.
 Heart filled with Puppy love
and hymns sung beneath
Daddy's watchful eye.

Nothing Holy remains
Happy a forgotten word.
Love drowned in Jack and coke
before he was thee years old.
No harmony in that  house
that house not a home.

Her health a poor excuse to stay
a good excuse to leave him home.
Praying no one would see.
My hand on fire as it closed
on the frozen food.

Filling my pack ~ without looking
Hungry doesn't care
as long as it's fed.
A starving beast~ wild
Anything a feast
after three days.

Afraid of getting caught.
Pride a terrible thing.
It always grows before the fall.
Tonight we eat like a king
in a land of milk and honey.
Pigtails and peas with rice.

Never knowing he knew
till the end.  ~ Grateful
that he understood.
wishing  I could change things.
Ashamed of my actions.
Sometimes sand castles fall.

Holding a feverish hand I
laughed until I cried.
I should have thrown down
that foolish pride. I could have had
steaks and chops too.

I still have the old key
He passed to me.
I hold it in my hand sometimes.
The old  freezers long gone.
I Hold on to  it remind me.
Sometimes Sand castles fall.

There isn't much a parent
misses. Hidden in our eyes.
Remember that and remember too
that The good stuff is locked away
But  that Daddy shares with all!

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009



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Date: 2/18/2009 4:08:00 PM
Patricia - wow this poem is amazing - i reckon the repetitive - "Sometimes sandcastles fall" lines held it together like wood glue does the dresser drawers - Loved this poem hon - God Bless, MJ
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Date: 2/18/2009 10:43:00 AM
Amazingly written Patricia...The imagery, the feelings...the refrain of falling sand castles...all of it!! A new favorite of mine! Much love, Steve
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Date: 2/18/2009 10:15:00 AM
Patricia, thanks for allowing me to read this thoughtful verse. I lost my Dad last month, and I can surely relate to your words "sand castles fall." Beautiful! Carolyn
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