Fallen

Never lie
That's what you preached
But your promises
We're hollow
You just left
Why
40 years later
You show up
Dying
Asking
For forgiveness
Why did you bother

Contest: Fallen 25-30 Words
Sponsored By: Nette Onclaud
Written By: Greg Hoffman 12/2/2015
About Father
29 Words

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Carl Fraser

Date: 5/24/2016 11:45:00 PM

I get this completely Greg. Great free verse, perfect message. Blessings Carl

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 12/4/2015 9:39:00 PM

Wonderful verse n win Greg.. big congrats!

Skat A

Date: 12/4/2015 8:12:00 PM

Greg, sweet win--- SKAT

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/4/2015 7:09:00 PM

yep, that is how they do sometimes. VERY good job in the contest. Congrats.

Rob Carmack

Date: 12/4/2015 6:38:00 PM

Potent poem. Congrats and I hope one day you will be able to forgive him.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 12/4/2015 4:41:00 PM

gripping work, greg... fathers are the first role models in our lives, awhh!..sweet, fine congrats and thank you for gracing my contest..huggs

Jan Allison

Date: 12/4/2015 4:26:00 PM

Dropping back with my congrats Greg:-) hugs Jan xx

Jan Allison

Date: 12/2/2015 2:57:00 PM

this is breathtakingly sad Greg I have a friend this has happened to - she hadn't seen him since she was six and she is now 58 now he is ailing and wants to live with her and her family and for them to look after him ... she's said no!:-( Good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Grace Mutindi

Date: 12/2/2015 9:34:00 AM

Hi Greg...love how you've portrayed the raw emotions. All the best in the Contest!