Fallen

FALLEN

Pepped up for her wedding
          Geared and went beyond my resources 
                    Travelled miles on receipt of invite
                                She clung only to special few
                                      Unapolegetically ignored and broken, I regretted going



Verse-30 words
This poem is about a sibling
Balveen Cheema
Contest: Fallen
Sponsor Nette Onclaud

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Paul Callus

Date: 12/5/2015 2:50:00 PM

An uncomfortable situation expressed in a dignified manner. Time 'camouflages' the hurt of something that, after all, might have been unintentional. ~ Congrats on your top win, Balveen. // paul

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 12/5/2015 1:19:00 AM

Well articulated!

Balveen Cheema
Date: 12/5/2015 3:11:00 AM

Thank-you, Richard!

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 12/4/2015 9:28:00 PM

Wonderful expressions Balveen... congrats on big win!

Balveen Cheema
Date: 12/5/2015 3:11:00 AM

Thanks Upma!

Skat A

Date: 12/4/2015 8:07:00 PM

lovely win. SK

Balveen Cheema
Date: 12/5/2015 3:12:00 AM

Thanks SK!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/4/2015 7:01:00 PM

oooh, SNAP, it's a sibling!!! I really liked this. Congrats on the win.

Balveen Cheema
Date: 12/4/2015 7:04:00 PM

How did this happen? I was writing to Cay Cay! Thanks Andrea!

Balveen Cheema
Date: 12/4/2015 7:03:00 PM

Oh Cay Cay this happened long ago. The competition revived the incident and how I had felt then. She was young then and in youth one is foolish. Till date I've never divulged my feelings. Thanks for your concern! Love, Balveen

CayCay Jennings

Date: 12/4/2015 6:20:00 PM

Congratulations on your emotional poem scoring so high. Seems this issue may be remedied by time, communications and sisterly love, I pray so ... CayCay