Kim Rodrigues Poet Couplet

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*impoverished (3 syllables)

**fallbrook — A quaint little town in So. Cal. It's lack of anything interesting, motivating, intellectual or entertaining forces the youth of this town to do drugs, skate downtown like it's cool, sit on the couch and get fat, get drunk at small kickbacks and hook up with many of their best friends prior hook-ups and share sexually transmitted diseases. The result of growing up in such town will lead to ultimate unsuccessfulness due to a piss-poor education system, low brain cell count from smoking to much mar-i-ju-ana and loneliness caused by their STD's. Who want's those nasty things anyways?! (From Urban Dictionary)

11 syllables each line
Amphibrach - CATALECTIC AMPHIBRACHIC TETRAMETER (often used in Russian Poetry)

Fallbrook

O tree hum! O tree slow! Under I, do leaves
of browning — descendant of dervish dust sleeves

and landing, upon my impoverished wan head.
A keen sense of failure of deep Autumn dead.

Like yellowing pages from book of the ill,
refuse from the oak’s perch alights on my sill.

And yawning, so tired with such aching, I grate
my teeth with strong vigor, thus feeling the weight

of boredom — there’s trembling beneath these poor nails.
The scratches of chalk drown out screams from my sails.

And rain and, yes, dark clouds, descend o’er my storm!
Alarmed and awakened, this soul crash — suds form.

And drooling with fervor — it dead ends my book,
of eating and drinking a golden fallbrook.

2/2/2018

*Fallbrook - a town lacking anything interesting, motivating, intellectual or entertaining forces the youth of this town to act out. A full description of this term as found in Urban Dictionary is in my comments.

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Cheryl Hoffman February 3, 2018 at 6:43 PM These bored stoners need to get jobs or volunteer or do something…very sad indeed! A very realistic thought provoking well done write Kim!~Che :) Kim Rodrigues February 3, 2018 at 8:59 PM Thank you, Cheryl!

Arturo Michael February 3, 2018 at 5:53 AM You described the dread of boredom very well...Enjoyed it...All the best Kim Kim Rodrigues February 3, 2018 at 7:30 AM Thank you, Arturo!

White Wolf February 2, 2018 at 9:48 PM Awesomely done as usual, Kim! Sad truth is that there are MANY towns like this here also. Kim Rodrigues February 2, 2018 at 9:50 PM I know! Thanks, WW!