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Failure

Failure Vows were exchanged Many promises made Two hearts crushed as feelings vanished Breakdown Entry for Catie's "traditional cinquain" contest

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Gwendolen Song

Date: 4/20/2011 5:31:00 AM

This is an epidemic in our country, isn't it , Carolyn? Missed reading your work recently. Homework galore!!! I wrote a Snickerdoodle Epulaeryu just for you! Read it while they are fresh out of the oven! Hugs. Hope u are doing well. Gwendolen

Desiree M

Date: 4/20/2011 3:15:00 AM

Very well written cinquain

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 4/19/2011 5:25:00 AM

Congratulations Carolyn on your well deserved win in Catie's contest "Traditional Cinquain". Love, Carol

Red Fiery

Date: 4/19/2011 5:02:00 AM

simply beautiful ! you have expressed so nicely ..............

Lynette Chachere

Date: 4/18/2011 3:52:00 PM

the love vanished..its even sadder when they don't accept it..but nothing is perfect. i hope you're well Carolyn.(: ~Always&Forever Lynette

James Foulk

Date: 4/17/2011 8:10:00 PM

a great write good luck in the contest.

Cory Long

Date: 4/17/2011 10:00:00 AM

nice job!. cory

Wilma Neels

Date: 4/17/2011 9:56:00 AM

Hey there Carolyn, congratulations on your win in Catie's contest ;) love Wilma

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 4/17/2011 5:39:00 AM

Congratulations on the fifth place win in the contest, Carolyn

Francine Roberts

Date: 4/16/2011 8:52:00 PM

congrats on your win with this excellent cinquain Carolyn

Black Eyed Susan

Date: 4/16/2011 3:02:00 PM

Congrats on your win! A very nice piece!

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 4/16/2011 2:31:00 PM

yup do I hear you, BIGHUGS! congrad's Light & Love [short sweet and a knife in the heart!]

Charles Henderson

Date: 4/16/2011 2:28:00 PM

Nice visual of a breakup. You did very well as usual. You are always a pleasure to read. Charles

Jack Horne

Date: 4/16/2011 2:03:00 PM

Many congrats, my friend : )

Kash Poet

Date: 4/16/2011 1:13:00 PM

I knew this one will be a sure winner.Congrats Carolyn on your win in the contest---kash

Jancarl Campi

Date: 4/15/2011 1:48:00 PM

THis poem is so sad and yet so true in some lives. I am so lucky the second time around with someone who really and truly loves me. Thanks for all of your kind comments. Take care and God bless you, Jancarl PS I entered the contest on a whim. I wish you luck with your entry.

Wiseton Prins

Date: 4/15/2011 12:06:00 PM

Such few words remind us a lot about the oldest and saddest pain > that of love gone limp. I suppose it can be traced to human nature as exhibited by kids, we will do anything to get something like that which our friends have, but as soon as we get it, we start taking it for-granted, until we entirely abandon it. > Love is a such a beautiful thing, but it requires wisdom to keep it alive and growing . >>Wish you an awesome weekend my dear friend, Carol. it means so much to have friends like you.

Gautami Phookan

Date: 4/15/2011 10:26:00 AM

Sad expressions, wish love never failed...nicely done Carolyn, liked the fourth line.Good luck in the contest.Love , Gautami

Doris Culverhouse

Date: 4/15/2011 4:11:00 AM

sad love doesn't last

Jslambert Mister Roboto

Date: 4/14/2011 9:23:00 PM

Evaporates as Odoriferous Absurdities in on a windy spring eve! I think this will be the title of my next poem. Excellent cinquain! "Winning is for Winners like Carolyn D. Her words, honey rivers wide, the finest poet-tree!" Ya DiGG?

Phyllis Babcock

Date: 4/14/2011 2:06:00 PM

Seems to be a lot of break down of marriages. Failure to communicate is a big problem these days. Good luck in Catie's contest. Love Phyl

Diane Locksley

Date: 4/14/2011 12:52:00 PM

Too many marriages break apart. Wedded bliss is fleeting apparently. Good luck in the contest Carolyn. Diane

Gert W. Knop

Date: 4/14/2011 8:38:00 AM

Great write Carolyn! But sometimes we might wish that feelings would vanish-they often won't! Best of luck with your entry! Love, Gert

Wilma Neels

Date: 4/14/2011 7:03:00 AM

Carolyn you said it so well. It is real sad but reality as well, good luck for Catie's contest, love Wilma

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/13/2011 10:46:00 PM

Great job and I love the synonyms you used for first and last lines; gosh, you should see me here, my eyes keep closing but I just can't finish yet!!