Failed Attempt At Dizain For Contest

I tried a dizain.  This is the best I could do.
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Alone in her room, she studied the mirror
Devastatingly aware, her face was plain
Rubbing her eyes, in hopes to see clearer
Only to find, all her efforts, in vain
She shifted focus, to keep herself sane
But the mirror taunted, til she returned
Deceitfully causing, her, grave concern
Relentless picking, poking and mocking
The jabs, lacerations, stings and burns
The expectations of girls, is shocking 
And holds too much power, to be unlearned

Copyright © | Year Posted 2020



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Date: 4/24/2020 2:44:00 PM
I suppose since nothing is perfect, it is simply human nature to look for the flaws instead of appreciating the beauty. Nicely penned, as usual. Next time you look in the mirror, just wink and smile and walk away:)
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Date: 4/16/2020 8:36:00 AM
I can't rate the form but the impact and intent of the poem is right on target. My stock line when I am introduced to a new baby is"doesn't he/she look just like themselves"
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Date: 4/15/2020 5:36:00 PM
Lump in the throat producing poem. Perspective is everything. I had a mother who did her best to undermine my self confidence, and do I have my moments (years) but it backfired for her, hairy no make up eating lots of garlic... but then there's the rage ;), Hugs! xomo
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