Darkland Poetry Poet Rhyme

Fading Fantasies

Sweet fantasies I harbored of you and me.
Once were clear, crisp, vibrant sensory
visions. Now, are nothing more
like they were before.
Although you
swore,
we both knew,
you’re not looking for
someone to always adore.
Edges take on a haze mentally.
Sweet fantasies I harbored of you and me.

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Kp Nunez March 2, 2015 at 7:28 PM Better late than never. Congrats on your win for this awesome write, Rachel. Thank you too, for placing me in your contest. :D Kim

Skat A February 27, 2015 at 11:09 PM Rachel, CONGRATULATIONS, on your Win :-) ~SKAT~

Dr. Upma A. Sharma February 24, 2015 at 12:50 AM Superb write Rachel,, Congrats on big win!

Rob Carmack February 23, 2015 at 2:39 PM Congrats Rachel on your win.

Richard Lamoureux February 23, 2015 at 8:08 AM Nice! Congrats!

Casarah Nance February 23, 2015 at 7:41 AM Well done on this new form! Grats on your win!

Jan Allison February 23, 2015 at 2:04 AM beautifully penned many congrats:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Andrea Dietrich February 23, 2015 at 12:32 AM This was a very sweet one you wrote for my contest. I enjoyed your use of enjambment too! Nicely done. Congrats to you, Rachel.

Suburban Lovechild February 21, 2015 at 10:41 PM "Once were clear, crisp, vibrant sensory visions. Now, are nothing more like they were before." - Perfect definition of fantasies, nice write.

Debra Squyres February 16, 2015 at 3:13 PM Beautifully done !! Love your word choice and how the beginning and ending lines wove in so effortlessly. Best of luck in the contest... reads like a winner to me !!

Kp Nunez February 13, 2015 at 9:37 PM Love the form, Rachel, the balance and substance of the Hourglass, how apt...Goodluck in the contest...Smiles from your kabayan in the land of thousand isles. :D

Constance La France February 13, 2015 at 5:57 PM Rachel, your poem is truly lovely, well done, best of luck in the contest, and I really like your invented name, that's perfect and thanks for visiting my poetry ~~

Anne-Lise Andresen February 13, 2015 at 3:58 AM - A wonderful poem in a nice shape, Rachel - Good luck in the contest - I wish you a sweet Valentine's Day and a beautiful weekend! - // Anne-Lise :)

Sara Kendrick February 12, 2015 at 10:41 AM Excellent work for the contest..Reads like a winner to me..Way to go..I enjoyed reading it today..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara Sara Kendrick February 12, 2015 at 10:41 AM Welcome to soup..Sara

Sandra Haight February 12, 2015 at 9:50 AM You did a fantastic job with this form, Rachel! It was a difficult one to work out, but your poem reads so smoothly! Yes, I chose "hourglass" too...first thing that came to mind. Best wishes for the contest. Sandra

Demetrios Trifiatis February 12, 2015 at 7:47 AM Many times in life we pass through the sentimental anguish you so brilliantly here describe dear Rachel, till one day our lesson we learn and our dreams realize! Good luck on the contest!

Casarah Nance February 11, 2015 at 8:57 PM Cool! That turned out really neat and your poem was awesome:)

Njeri Hunjeri February 11, 2015 at 1:21 AM Its a beautiful hourglass :-) Darkland Poetry February 11, 2015 at 5:16 PM Thank you so much!