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Fading Fantasies

Sweet fantasies I harbored of you and me. Once were clear, crisp, vibrant sensory visions. Now, are nothing more like they were before. Although you swore, we both knew, you’re not looking for someone to always adore. Edges take on a haze mentally. Sweet fantasies I harbored of you and me.

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Kp Nunez

Date: 3/2/2015 7:28:00 PM

Better late than never. Congrats on your win for this awesome write, Rachel. Thank you too, for placing me in your contest. :D Kim

Skat A

Date: 2/27/2015 11:09:00 PM

Rachel, CONGRATULATIONS, on your Win :-) ~SKAT~

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 2/24/2015 12:50:00 AM

Superb write Rachel,, Congrats on big win!

Rob Carmack

Date: 2/23/2015 2:39:00 PM

Congrats Rachel on your win.

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 2/23/2015 8:08:00 AM

Nice! Congrats!

Casarah Nance

Date: 2/23/2015 7:41:00 AM

Well done on this new form! Grats on your win!

Jan Allison

Date: 2/23/2015 2:04:00 AM

beautifully penned many congrats:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/23/2015 12:32:00 AM

This was a very sweet one you wrote for my contest. I enjoyed your use of enjambment too! Nicely done. Congrats to you, Rachel.

Suburban Lovechild

Date: 2/21/2015 10:41:00 PM

"Once were clear, crisp, vibrant sensory visions. Now, are nothing more like they were before." - Perfect definition of fantasies, nice write.

Debra Squyres

Date: 2/16/2015 3:13:00 PM

Beautifully done !! Love your word choice and how the beginning and ending lines wove in so effortlessly. Best of luck in the contest... reads like a winner to me !!

Kp Nunez

Date: 2/13/2015 9:37:00 PM

Love the form, Rachel, the balance and substance of the Hourglass, how apt...Goodluck in the contest...Smiles from your kabayan in the land of thousand isles. :D

Constance La France

Date: 2/13/2015 5:57:00 PM

Rachel, your poem is truly lovely, well done, best of luck in the contest, and I really like your invented name, that's perfect and thanks for visiting my poetry ~~

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 2/13/2015 3:58:00 AM

- A wonderful poem in a nice shape, Rachel - Good luck in the contest - I wish you a sweet Valentine's Day and a beautiful weekend! - // Anne-Lise :)

Sara Kendrick

Date: 2/12/2015 10:41:00 AM

Excellent work for the contest..Reads like a winner to me..Way to go..I enjoyed reading it today..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara

Sara Kendrick
Date: 2/12/2015 10:41:00 AM

Welcome to soup..Sara

Sandra Haight

Date: 2/12/2015 9:50:00 AM

You did a fantastic job with this form, Rachel! It was a difficult one to work out, but your poem reads so smoothly! Yes, I chose "hourglass" too...first thing that came to mind. Best wishes for the contest. Sandra

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 2/12/2015 7:47:00 AM

Many times in life we pass through the sentimental anguish you so brilliantly here describe dear Rachel, till one day our lesson we learn and our dreams realize! Good luck on the contest!

Casarah Nance

Date: 2/11/2015 8:57:00 PM

Cool! That turned out really neat and your poem was awesome:)

Njeri Hunjeri

Date: 2/11/2015 1:21:00 AM

Its a beautiful hourglass :-)

Darkland Poetry
Date: 2/11/2015 5:16:00 PM

Thank you so much!