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Fading Fantasies

Sweet fantasies I harbored of you and me.
Once were clear, crisp, vibrant sensory
visions. Now, are nothing more
like they were before.
Although you
swore,
we both knew,
you’re not looking for
someone to always adore.
Edges take on a haze mentally.
Sweet fantasies I harbored of you and me.

Copyright © Darkland Poetry | Year Posted 2015

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Kp Nunez Date: 3/2/2015 7:28:00 PM Better late than never. Congrats on your win for this awesome write, Rachel. Thank you too, for placing me in your contest. :D Kim Login to Reply

Skat A Date: 2/27/2015 11:09:00 PM Rachel, CONGRATULATIONS, on your Win :-) ~SKAT~ Login to Reply

Dr. Upma A. Sharma Date: 2/24/2015 12:50:00 AM Superb write Rachel,, Congrats on big win! Login to Reply

Rob Carmack Date: 2/23/2015 2:39:00 PM Congrats Rachel on your win. Login to Reply

Richard Lamoureux Date: 2/23/2015 8:08:00 AM Nice! Congrats! Login to Reply

Casarah Nance Date: 2/23/2015 7:41:00 AM Well done on this new form! Grats on your win! Login to Reply

Jan Allison Date: 2/23/2015 2:04:00 AM beautifully penned many congrats:-) Hugs Jan xxx Login to Reply

Andrea Dietrich Date: 2/23/2015 12:32:00 AM This was a very sweet one you wrote for my contest. I enjoyed your use of enjambment too! Nicely done. Congrats to you, Rachel. Login to Reply

Suburban Lovechild Date: 2/21/2015 10:41:00 PM "Once were clear, crisp, vibrant sensory visions. Now, are nothing more like they were before." - Perfect definition of fantasies, nice write. Login to Reply

Debra Squyres Date: 2/16/2015 3:13:00 PM Beautifully done !! Love your word choice and how the beginning and ending lines wove in so effortlessly. Best of luck in the contest... reads like a winner to me !! Login to Reply

Kp Nunez Date: 2/13/2015 9:37:00 PM Love the form, Rachel, the balance and substance of the Hourglass, how apt...Goodluck in the contest...Smiles from your kabayan in the land of thousand isles. :D Login to Reply

Constance La France Date: 2/13/2015 5:57:00 PM Rachel, your poem is truly lovely, well done, best of luck in the contest, and I really like your invented name, that's perfect and thanks for visiting my poetry ~~ Login to Reply

Anne-Lise Andresen Date: 2/13/2015 3:58:00 AM - A wonderful poem in a nice shape, Rachel - Good luck in the contest - I wish you a sweet Valentine's Day and a beautiful weekend! - // Anne-Lise :) Login to Reply

Sara Kendrick Date: 2/12/2015 10:41:00 AM Excellent work for the contest..Reads like a winner to me..Way to go..I enjoyed reading it today..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara Login to Reply Sara Kendrick Date: 2/12/2015 10:41:00 AM Welcome to soup..Sara

Sandra Haight Date: 2/12/2015 9:50:00 AM You did a fantastic job with this form, Rachel! It was a difficult one to work out, but your poem reads so smoothly! Yes, I chose "hourglass" too...first thing that came to mind. Best wishes for the contest. Sandra Login to Reply

Demetrios Trifiatis Date: 2/12/2015 7:47:00 AM Many times in life we pass through the sentimental anguish you so brilliantly here describe dear Rachel, till one day our lesson we learn and our dreams realize! Good luck on the contest! Login to Reply

Casarah Nance Date: 2/11/2015 8:57:00 PM Cool! That turned out really neat and your poem was awesome:) Login to Reply

Njeri Hunjeri Date: 2/11/2015 1:21:00 AM Its a beautiful hourglass :-) Login to Reply Darkland Poetry Date: 2/11/2015 5:16:00 PM Thank you so much!