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Faded Presence

Faded Presence A weeping pillow holds tightly to the remnant scent of ecstasy, inhaling faded presence we console one another John G. Lawless 6/20/2017

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/23/2017 8:26:00 PM

and yes I rhymed my tanka. HOpe I don't lose points for that. I almost went for overkill and was gonna use head instead of face in the middle line!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/23/2017 8:25:00 PM

I really like this. It's like you were doing that one in three contest using two different themes (wilted is a bit like faded!)

Daniel Turner

Date: 6/20/2017 5:14:00 PM

It is a little sad, but beautifully written, John. I think it's great.

Abdul Malik

Date: 6/20/2017 3:22:00 PM

This is nice. Good luck.

Chris Green

Date: 6/20/2017 12:49:00 PM

Nice, kind of sad and lonely but beautifully crafted. This short poem paints an amazing picture and will spur emotions in your readers.