Exquisite Closeness

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Written: January 06, 2024 
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Shimmering swaths
of cerulean sea
ionize comely light
purple-tinged sand
strewn with tattered shells
during low tide,
summon imperial thrones,
tartly lovely youth
amid sparkling Tyrian swells,
whilst peering 
solace amid 
vibrant splendor 
of landscape, 
as serene slopes 
and lucid pleas prevail, 
I wait with ebbed breath
for an ethereal grace
to ignite a spark 
of hope.

We haven't touched yet,
we're just syncing
over ariose love song,
as warm rain and clouds—bow
"Salut d'amour",
violins string opalescent tones
that rise and fall in pitch,
as a link to ink
an iridescent origami doodle
of a jewel-lit song,
summer nights of
ochre acrylics—a plethora
of fairy flickers and fireflies
amid a flurry of filigree,
to inveigle her into playing.

We draw on our kinship
as we float freely,
over crestfallen ocean
a pen swayed in time,
with an Elysian rim
on my horizon,
I whirl my love whims
and swirl the walnut wood
in disconsolate loops,
In a spice grist mill
sprinkles to spice my life.

Keys and gaunt codes
to demure this dalliance
served with Mirabelle tart
and for the sake of Muscat,
as the breeze tickles
those are my shutters
I fantasize about lying,
over her fastidious breast
as empyreal lee of
a sun-kissed knoll,
should she ever grasp
my hand and our
lips converge, 
in an esoteric way
would we fit snugly?
as a dovetail joint in unison,
or would we plummet?
to our deaths
in shattered light?

8th place contest winner
Copyright © | Year Posted 2024


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Date: 1/9/2024 2:20:00 PM
Congratulations on your placement in the contest
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Date: 1/8/2024 7:21:00 PM
Back with heartiest congratulations for your beautiful win, dear Sotto ~ keep writing and shining, always!! :)
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Date: 1/7/2024 4:47:00 PM
Whoah, this is powerful, the diction of a lover pining... and the backdrop of ocean and sand...how beautiful. "lucid plea" amazing tones...
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Date: 1/7/2024 10:06:00 AM
I keep trying to fix my typos on this phone but the edit button is so close to the blocking eye, I am afraid to block people when I try to hit edit!
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Date: 1/7/2024 10:04:00 AM
This is so creative, Sotto. Do you often use short lines like this? Such beautiful magery
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Date: 1/7/2024 9:23:00 AM
Oh wow, this is such a heartwarming and elegantly romantic poem, dear Sotto.. I love your stunning wordplay here throughout and also, the resplendent hues of exquisite wordplay which convey those syllables of love and affection, in a truly profound manner.. The flow of lines here is absolutely splendid and especially like these lines "purple-tinged sand strewn with tattered shells during low tide", "iridescent origami doodle of a jewel-lit song,summer nights of ochre acrylics—" brilliantly done!
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Date: 1/7/2024 8:52:00 AM
Another excellent poem dear Sotto..It is a skilful blend of sensory imagery and emotional depth, exploring themes of nature, love, and human connection. The intricate language and thoughtful metaphors contribute to a nuanced and evocative piece that invites readers to reflect on the beauty and uncertainty of love.
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Date: 1/7/2024 5:40:00 AM
Shimmering swaths of cerulean sea ionize comely light purple-tinged sand strewn with tattered shells during low tide, summon imperial thrones---just a sampling of your awesome descriptions my friend. Keep writing these gems, Lasaad.
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Date: 1/7/2024 12:08:00 AM
Ah Dr sotto, this is so very well written and expressed and flows in such a romanticized manner: your free verse truly stands out as much as your rhymes for the way they flow and also depth of your lines descriptive manner you writ and weave imagery. What stood out the most for me in this is how you’ve written “ purple-tinged sand strewn with tattered shells during low tide, summon imperial thrones, tartly lovely youth“ soulful islandish imagery that is captivating! Brilliant write! Best wishes
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