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Written: January 06, 2024 ______________________________________ Shimmering swaths of cerulean sea ionize comely light purple-tinged sand strewn with tattered shells during low tide, summon imperial thrones, tartly lovely youth amid sparkling Tyrian swells, whilst peering solace amid  vibrant splendor  of landscape, as serene slopes  and lucid pleas prevail,  I wait with ebbed breath for an ethereal grace to ignite a spark of hope. We haven't touched yet, we're just syncing over ariose love song, as warm rain and clouds—bow "Salut d'amour", violins string opalescent tones that rise and fall in pitch, as a link to ink an iridescent origami doodle of a jewel-lit song, summer nights of ochre acrylics—a plethora of fairy flickers and fireflies amid a flurry of filigree, to inveigle her into playing. We draw on our kinship as we float freely, over crestfallen ocean a pen swayed in time, with an Elysian rim on my horizon, I whirl my love whims and swirl the walnut wood in disconsolate loops, In a spice grist mill sprinkles to spice my life. Keys and gaunt codes to demure this dalliance served with Mirabelle tart and for the sake of Muscat, as the breeze tickles those are my shutters I fantasize about lying, over her fastidious breast as empyreal lee of a sun-kissed knoll, should she ever grasp my hand and our lips converge,  in an esoteric way would we fit snugly? as a dovetail joint in unison, or would we plummet? to our deaths in shattered light? 8th place contest winner

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Date: 1/9/2024 2:20:00 PM
Congratulations on your placement in the contest
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Date: 1/8/2024 7:21:00 PM
Back with heartiest congratulations for your beautiful win, dear Sotto ~ keep writing and shining, always!! :)
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Date: 1/7/2024 4:47:00 PM
Whoah, this is powerful, the diction of a lover pining... and the backdrop of ocean and sand...how beautiful. "lucid plea" amazing tones...
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Date: 1/7/2024 10:06:00 AM
I keep trying to fix my typos on this phone but the edit button is so close to the blocking eye, I am afraid to block people when I try to hit edit!
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Date: 1/7/2024 10:04:00 AM
This is so creative, Sotto. Do you often use short lines like this? Such beautiful magery
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Date: 1/7/2024 9:23:00 AM
Oh wow, this is such a heartwarming and elegantly romantic poem, dear Sotto.. I love your stunning wordplay here throughout and also, the resplendent hues of exquisite wordplay which convey those syllables of love and affection, in a truly profound manner.. The flow of lines here is absolutely splendid and especially like these lines "purple-tinged sand strewn with tattered shells during low tide", "iridescent origami doodle of a jewel-lit song,summer nights of ochre acrylics—" brilliantly done!
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Date: 1/7/2024 8:52:00 AM
Another excellent poem dear Sotto..It is a skilful blend of sensory imagery and emotional depth, exploring themes of nature, love, and human connection. The intricate language and thoughtful metaphors contribute to a nuanced and evocative piece that invites readers to reflect on the beauty and uncertainty of love.
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Date: 1/7/2024 5:40:00 AM
Shimmering swaths of cerulean sea ionize comely light purple-tinged sand strewn with tattered shells during low tide, summon imperial thrones---just a sampling of your awesome descriptions my friend. Keep writing these gems, Lasaad.
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Date: 1/7/2024 12:08:00 AM
Ah Dr sotto, this is so very well written and expressed and flows in such a romanticized manner: your free verse truly stands out as much as your rhymes for the way they flow and also depth of your lines descriptive manner you writ and weave imagery. What stood out the most for me in this is how you’ve written “ purple-tinged sand strewn with tattered shells during low tide, summon imperial thrones, tartly lovely youth“ soulful islandish imagery that is captivating! Brilliant write! Best wishes
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Date: 1/6/2024 4:24:00 PM
dearest Sotto--your poem left me breathless for many reasons. First, I felt intensity and passion as the poem rose to its crescendo through your exquisitely constructed lines and verses. Your imagery captivated me as did your use of alliteration. I loved 'inveigled her into playing, a pen swayed in time, link to ink an iridescent origami doodle and your use of Mirabella tart. I read and re-read this poem with its hopeful and desperate yearning. It captured my hear. Am faving it!
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