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Expire the Eye Walker

. Expire the Eye Walker Creeping amongst the lash of nights eye = 9 He ignores around it, making dry = 9 Pulling the lids back with both fists = 8 As he skids across our eyes mist = 8 He causes bursts of replay = 7 Credible to some, at day = 7 Yet fixated are we = 6 On the sand we can’t see = 6 Annoying to some = 5 We’ll pick till it comes = 5 Love at a glance = 4 Sandman’s romance = 4 Most review = 3 His walk through = 3 To find = 2 He’s blind = 2 Grain =1 Brained =1 ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ This is a “Mock Bowler” poem Each stanza reduces syllable count beginning with nine and ending with one The form “Mock Bowler”, created by Sandra Hudson, resembles the pins at the end of a bowling lane Each two-line stanza has the same syllable count and stanzas must rhyme last words

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Date: 7/3/2016 12:17:00 AM
Sandra H, enjoyed reading your poem, thank you for sharing your thoughts through words. *SKAT* -
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Date: 12/19/2011 11:43:00 AM
Merry Christmas and Happy New Year to you and yours Sandra. Love and blessings, Carol
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Date: 8/27/2009 4:57:00 PM
creative! jhlovingiii
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Date: 8/1/2009 8:34:00 AM
Looks as if I get to tap you, Kristy and I didn't see that James Fraser had done a duo already (our bad) so we think you and Sami would write an EXCELLENT duo together. Have fun......Aleera
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Date: 7/25/2009 8:04:00 AM
Hey, Alexandra, this is an awesome new verse form! Love the syllable structure and the way you made each pair of lines rhyme. Great work! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 7/23/2009 6:30:00 PM
very interesting,Sandra, your own creation? I've had you mixed up with some one else, I'll explain to you on soup mail! God bless Moses
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Date: 7/23/2009 6:12:00 PM
Soup Mail!!!!!....Aleera
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Date: 7/23/2009 8:08:00 AM
Very interesting, I have never heard of that before. Its great though....Aleera
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Date: 7/23/2009 6:45:00 AM
Very clever, Sandra....and an excellent job here!! You have wowed us!!
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Date: 7/22/2009 7:46:00 PM
very creative Sandra! actually the truth I'm accepting today is that I've got "poets melacholy" jimmy
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Date: 7/22/2009 7:44:00 PM
this is a very interesting form. i like it. check out some of my poems
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