Kim Rodrigues Poet Tanka

Examine Each Word

 “The point blank of our firelocks,when attention
is paid to the loading, is known to be about 300 yards” 

      Lewis Lochee  Elements of Field Fortification
         
  
            examine each word
within musket-shot of shore
   point-blank as you aim
   over the placid waters
aim for sweet spot not the throat


11/18/2019

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Gershon Wolf November 23, 2019 at 11:09 PM Just love your tankas, Kim. Excellent penning; excellent point! :) gw Kim Rodrigues November 24, 2019 at 7:04 AM Thanks so much! Hugs...Kim

Gregory Richard Barden November 20, 2019 at 6:38 AM Indeed ... 'tis the heart our words should rend ... with sweet ferocity and deadly passion. I love this, Kim - wonderful! :o) <3 Kim Rodrigues November 20, 2019 at 7:06 AM Thanks so much, Greg!

S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri November 19, 2019 at 1:05 AM Woahh what an extraordinary sublime poem. Kudos.!! Pls pleez do comment/ review my newest poem too. Kim Rodrigues November 20, 2019 at 7:05 AM Thank you!

Andrea Dietrich November 18, 2019 at 3:30 PM what a great metaphor, Kim! Kim Rodrigues November 18, 2019 at 5:51 PM Thank you, Andrea!

Caren Krutsinger November 18, 2019 at 2:52 PM "not the throat" - wise advice, Kim. Kim Rodrigues November 18, 2019 at 5:51 PM LOL...right?!

Silent One November 18, 2019 at 12:30 PM Very clever... Kim Rodrigues November 18, 2019 at 5:50 PM Thank you, dear poet! :)

Na Na November 18, 2019 at 11:31 AM Hi Kim. Thanks for this luster. Have a great day Kim Rodrigues November 18, 2019 at 5:19 PM Your welcome!

Chris Green November 18, 2019 at 8:23 AM Kind of dark but definitely worth reading each word. Kim Rodrigues November 18, 2019 at 5:18 PM Thank you, Chris!

Joseph May November 18, 2019 at 7:43 AM Placid waters where war is imminent...An intriguing write Kim.. Kim Rodrigues November 18, 2019 at 5:18 PM Thank you, Joe!