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Life is a beautiful liar, where hope is a graveyard of caterpillars. Death is an ugly truth, where virgin butterflies flutter immortally. Love is the only true guide. Oh my beloved, when you hid behind a veil of metaphors, I wrote your name in the sand, with simple words, watched as the tide carried each letter to your shore, so you could build a sandcastle for my homeless heart. Then you appeared, enchanting and exotic, like the scent of a summer night under clear blue skies. I recall the day we met, confused and bemused. You used to tell me there was no such thing as forever, until your words bled like a mistress of poetry. My hands were tired from scribbling meaningless musings, until I fell in love with a poet - you gave them a purpose. My muse, who once punished me with tormenting silence, now beat against my heart to justify the majesty of your vision - ink like waterfalls began to flow upon rivers of romantic verses. As the world sleeps tonight, I'm tired from watching airplanes take off, as satanic seas keep us apart. My heart reminds me of denied treasure, but my soul believes it will kiss such riches soon. As we create our own cocoon, where devotion flourishes into an eternal union.

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Date: 12/14/2023 4:43:00 PM
This is epic in thought and mood. Proof that the best poets are alive, today.
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Date: 12/13/2023 4:10:00 PM
a touching and lovely romance poem! It pulled on my heart strings knowing that an ocean of distance keeps you physically apart. I loved this line: Then you appeared, enchanting and exotic, like the scent of a summer night under clear blue skies.' Such a delightful image. Captivating! have a splendid evening, Sara
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Date: 12/13/2023 3:43:00 PM
Very lovely & romantic!
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Date: 12/13/2023 12:47:00 PM
This poetry shows true emotions while expressing heartfelt reverence for a loved one. Despite the vast geographical distance, it is capable of communicating an affection that transcends physical boundaries. It is an exceptional masterwork of love verse. It is an extraordinary poem, and a fave for me
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Date: 12/13/2023 10:31:00 AM
A superb poem of love, my friend. This wonderful line, 'Ink like waterfalls began to flow upon rivers of romantic verses' is most excellent. A Fav for me.
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Date: 12/13/2023 7:08:00 AM
so you could build a sandcastle for my homeless heart--how wonderfully romantic, SO. Much enjoyed the tenor of your poem.
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Date: 12/13/2023 5:37:00 AM
With my hazy memory, i still can remember this poem this is the kind of poem that makes my heart stop and i have to slowly catch my breath reallyX I absolutely love the depth of love youve expressed here in such eloquence and in a seamless manner. The island ish imagery and how one feels like they are found when they finally did find their beloved is beyond sweet and soulful to read. Its just so touching and made me go awwn! I love the lines “ My hands were tired from—“ made me tear up gosh!!
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Date: 12/13/2023 5:38:00 AM
And also the lines “ My heart reminds me of denied treasure, but my soul believes it will kiss such riches soon.” Faith and hope emanates through your lines so poetically woven as always dear silent one! You amaze me and inspire me. This is one of my most fave poems by you! FAV!
Date: 12/13/2023 5:31:00 AM
Awwn, this is such s lovely romantic poem, reflecting the true emotions and feelings for the beloved. I think this poem speaks of a long distance love, although the hearts are connected eternally. You've crafted this in so much poetic elegance and artistic techniques that is truly enchanting! I love those metaphors, imageries, alliterations and similes you've used to depict the beauty"As we create our own cocoon, where devotion flourishes into an eternal union", "bled like a mistress of poetry"
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Date: 12/13/2023 5:33:00 AM
"now beat against my heart to justify the majesty of your vision -ink like waterfalls began to flow upon rivers of romantic verses" So many exquisite lines here that just swirl in the beautiful harmonies of affection.. "Then you appeared, enchanting and exotic, like the scent of a summer night" And that opening part is so heartfelt too, this is a Fav :) always a pleasure to read your work!! (Also, I had to attempt again commenting on this poem because just when I pressed enter, soup crashed lol)

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