Sotto Poet Poet Free verse

Epitaph-Unraveled Words

trickling streams   enlist fingers stroke
translating silent stares script air bubbles

soul skirmishes   dying   and breath twitches
her amort jabs shatter blind eyes

soft breaths   linger aphonic   sighs
surfboarding alongside rocky creeks

you wish to decry me with   metaphors
whispered secrets   shared solely betwixt us

words untied    weighed by fireflies glow
bemoaning to aurify   amid fiery   solar flares

hoping for air in a pathless stream
let me shed words from   balm of dry lips

you said that   you might catch them

I've seen the way a glass dances, though
slips through your fingers   and shatters 

I hear a forlorn violin   pluck its strings
catacombs lurk in a hollow cage

when it beleaguers, it wails and shrieks
an uncaged spirit walks with a dog

left, just a beshrew echo in a silent world

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Sara Kendrick May 13, 2024 at 2:50 PM Interesting winner. Congratulations. Sara K

Silent One May 8, 2024 at 1:18 PM The poem's use of metaphor and symbolism adds layers of meaning, with "metaphors whispered secrets" and "words untied weighed by fireflies glow" suggesting a yearning for connection and understanding. The imagery of "hoping for air in a pathless stream" and "shedding words from balm of dry lips" conveys a sense of desperation and longing for release. The final lines of the poem, with their imagery of a "forlorn violin" and "uncaged spirit," evoke a haunting sense of loneliness and isolation. The use of sound and rhythm throughout the poem adds to its emotional impact, creating a sense of tension and resonance that lingers in the reader's mind.

Ink Empress May 8, 2024 at 9:14 AM Wow this is so good! I love your wordplay and also how you’ve written so many lines in this really stood out for me! Especially “ words untied weighed by fireflies glow” so creative and artistic! “I hear a forlorn violin pluck its strings catacombs lurk in a hollow cage ” as i read those lines i can hear too the forlorn violin and the music so evocative! And poignant plus powerful while also ensuring you maintain your usual use of poetic techniques that leaves us readers in awe! Love this!

Hilda Greenhough May 8, 2024 at 8:16 AM I feel a sense of desolation, maybe even a sci-fi planet that struggles. Pertinent to our times and to care of mother earth. I enjoy this very creative poem.

Vijay Pandit May 8, 2024 at 5:56 AM Wonderfully dwelling in thoughts released from a poetic mind, my friend. Superb images throughout. ---soft breaths linger aphonic sighs surfboarding alongside rocky creeks---words untied weighed by fireflies glow bemoaning to aurify amid fiery solar flares--so very lovely!

Duke Beaufort May 8, 2024 at 5:34 AM SP, this poem seems like Side B (the opposite side) of what you presented in your previous post with the music Ode to Joy. It's a very interesting read on a situation where someone doesn't seem to be listening very well. That seems like a bit of a frustrating situation you capture so adroitly.

Richard Lamoureux May 7, 2024 at 2:32 PM I enjoyed this atmospheric write. It has a haunting feeling to it.