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Written: May 07, 2024

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he peppered peony
petals, poems ...
                        past my path

scattered starlight, songs,
moonstones …
                        spaning my spine

friendship fell
                        in felicity.

hush the bee hum in
my hooters were hazel

Begonias bloom
                  bound

silent songs
strum my sternum

funneled fairly
fetching forward!
 
                  fettered

                  gramophone of love

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Silent One Date: 5/8/2024 1:14:00 PM Hey Sotto.. Your poem is a delightful and enigmatic journey through a series of vivid and sensory experiences. The brevity and fragmentation of the lines create a sense of immediacy and intensity, drawing the reader into a world of heightened sensations and emotions. The use of alliteration and assonance, such as "peppered peony petals" and "scattered starlight, songs," adds musicality and texture to the poem, enhancing its sensory appeal. The imagery of flowers, starlight, and moonstones evokes a dreamlike atmosphere, with each element contributing to the overall tapestry of sensations. Login to Reply

Jay Narain Date: 5/8/2024 11:05:00 AM A symphony of alliteration. A great write from a great poet. Login to Reply

Sara Kendrick Date: 5/8/2024 10:59:00 AM Reads like a good contender in a contest if there is one. Thanks for sharing your work with such nice alliterations within. I appreciate your visit to my page. Sara K Login to Reply

Ink Empress Date: 5/8/2024 9:11:00 AM Ah dr sotto i love the seamless and artistic flow of alliterations throughout this and how youv woven words in the most eloquent manner. Your arrangement of lines too in this really is creative. I especially love the lines “ scattered starlight, songs, moonstones … spaning my spine” so descriptive and ethereal! I love moonstones. “ Begonias bloom bound” so beautiful! “ hush the bee hum in my hooters were hazel“ so unique and love the musical cadence of words! Pleasure reading this. Sending you light always Login to Reply

Vijay Pandit Date: 5/8/2024 5:57:00 AM A symphony of alliteration. A lovely depiction and display of your poetic prowess, my friend. Login to Reply

Duke Beaufort Date: 5/8/2024 5:40:00 AM SP, I love how you describe that words can foster a relationship (even a brief one). It's amazing how you describe your body as a musical instrument in response. It's a very striking image. Login to Reply

Victor Buhagiar Date: 5/8/2024 1:42:00 AM What a great artistic poem you wrote. Your imagery and alliteration shine. Your love must echo in you as you wrote this. Login to Reply

Susan Ashley Date: 5/7/2024 5:58:00 PM Dear Lasaad, indeed, your golden pen spills enchanting thoughts, imagery and beauty. Your alliteration with soft consonant sounds (m, s, f, h,) is graceful and the alliteration with hard consonants (p, b) pack a bit of punch and provide contrast in sound. Your creative imagery and metaphors are captivating.. I especially enjoyed "hush the bee hum" and "silent songs/ strum my sternum" wow! striking! Such an exceptional piece my friend, your poetic artistry shines! Warmest wishes.. ~Susan Login to Reply