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On another impoverished evening so strangely bleak, the moon weeps for more burning her soul must retain, And she clings like a stem to the tree of life that frozen eyes grasp coiled branches, weighing down on howls of raven’s play. Just now … crisscrossed sky lanterns fog the walls of a withering foliage, like hushed matte from dusk’s greenery Pouring balm on a requiem in need of shade, while in her veins drip… a constant gush as meshed twigs still interlace on leafy ribs Immersed in the ardor of their moments, one fragrant orchid and musky trunk…inseparable, bound together by affectionate, yet lost stars. With slight acceptance this rooted love will always meld despite tree of life faintly drooping; ...in clinched angle, she lays on his buried grass until dim twilight shuts off. For Broken Wing’s Entwined Contest 2/12/2016

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Date: 2/28/2016 4:37:00 AM
So pleased that this poem is a top winner, Nette, otherwise I might have completely missed it! You offer passionate and beautiful imagery in a style which is unmistakably yours:) Congratulations!! hugs // paul
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Date: 2/24/2016 12:16:00 PM
Lovely imagery of 'entwined,' Nette. Congratulations on your podium win! Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 2/23/2016 11:43:00 AM
Nette, Congratulations on your Entwined win... XOX ~LINDA~
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Date: 2/23/2016 9:50:00 AM
Nette, I'm back to say CONGRATS! Janice
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Date: 2/23/2016 9:33:00 AM
Passionate write with such imagery! Wonderful Nette.
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Date: 2/23/2016 8:38:00 AM
Congratulations on your win with this beautiful well-written verse! Enjoyed reading this.
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Date: 2/22/2016 10:06:00 PM
Congrats on great win with this superb verse dear nette..
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Date: 2/22/2016 6:52:00 PM
Nette, congrats on your placement in the contest! -luloo *smiles*
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Date: 2/12/2016 2:54:00 PM
dazzling in its descriptive wisps…truly beautiful Nette
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Date: 2/12/2016 10:37:00 AM
I like the sharp image this amazing poem creates. There is tenderness that flows beneath the surface of your deep expression!
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Date: 2/12/2016 9:58:00 AM
Astoundingly moving and splendid poetry.It's hard to separate the twining of soul mates, much like the weave of life's tree!
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Date: 2/12/2016 10:37:00 AM
7 it is!
Date: 2/12/2016 8:51:00 AM
Hauntingly beautiful, Nette! Janice
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Date: 2/11/2016 10:53:00 PM
Nette,you have painted such a beautiful picture, I love it. Good luck in the contest :)
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