Lee Ramage Poet Rhyme

Empty Nest - Constanza

Cardboard boxes filled on the floor,
   Photos gone from nightside table,
   Where we read a bedtime fable.

Twinges as I walk by her door,
   Her sweet bed where she use to lay;
   Sits empty yet another day.

Happiness, no crying I swore,
   Accomplishments I am in awe;
   Her future is a life in law.

Time has gone so fast, I want more.
   That crazy smile and ponytail;
   always melts my heart without fail.
   
Missing my daughter I adore.
   So proud and knowing she’ll do well
   but her absence still hurts like hell.  



Cardboard boxes filled on the floor,
Twinges as I walk by her door,
Happiness, no crying I swore,
Time has gone so fast, I want more.    
Missing my daughter I adore.





Written August 26, 2012
For Andrea Dietrich’s contest
“Can You Constanza”

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Carol Sunshine Brown September 26, 2012 at 5:51 AM A belated congratulations on your super win in Andrea's "Can You Constanza" contest Lee. Love, Carol

Poet Destroyer A September 24, 2012 at 10:02 AM Lee, :-). Congratulations with your awesome winning poem in Andrea's "Can you Constanza?" contest. Love it, always~ LUV*PD

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl September 24, 2012 at 2:09 AM Belated Congratulations Lee xx

Joseph May September 23, 2012 at 5:14 AM congrats on your win Lee

Debbie Guzzi September 22, 2012 at 1:55 PM Truly a fine envolving write, reminding many of us of children now grown and gone! Congradulations on your fine verse winning. Light & Love

Joyce Johnson September 22, 2012 at 8:41 AM How well I know this feeling. We are so at odds with own feelings when our precious children start to grow up and away. Congratulations on a great entry. Love, Joyce

Olusegun Arowolo September 22, 2012 at 3:03 AM Wonderful and beautiful write,Lee.Good job...Congratulations on your win...

Len Gasun September 22, 2012 at 12:56 AM My hearty congratulations on your win my dear friend, Lee! hugs:) Leonora

Connie Marcum Wong September 21, 2012 at 11:50 PM Lee, Congratulations on your placement in Andrea’s “Can you Constanza? Contest.” There were so many really amazing entries we had a very difficult time deciding. We had to go by who followed the form best, and whose poem was most creative. I spent 4 and half hours going over the poems and Andrea, a lot longer. Thank you so much for your wonderful entry Mahalo, Connie

Linda-Marie Sweetheart September 21, 2012 at 11:20 PM MANY CONGRATS LEE ON A FABULOUS WRITE AND AMAZING WELL DESERVED WIN LUV .. A UNIQUE PIECE ..

Andrea Dietrich September 21, 2012 at 8:57 PM this one is full of the feelings that many parents feel when their kids leave home (though for me, that was a very nice time in my life. haha. I was able to start writing lots of poems!). My favorite stanza is where you paint the picture of your daughter with her crazy smile and pony tail. And the last line of stanza 5 is heart wrenching. Congrats for your place in my contest.

Sara Kendrick August 30, 2012 at 4:30 PM An emotive and expressive work..That time when the child leaves the nest is a very difficult one..Good luck in the contest..Reads like winners' list to me..Enjoyed reading this eve..Your presence at my work today is very uplifting and encouraging...Fire ants are native to South America but were brought into North America where they have no natural enemies and they have really done well here..They have a stinger with which they deliver venom which is very bad and some are allergic to it..Sara Lee Ramage August 30, 2012 at 9:07 PM It was pleasure to read your work today. These fire ants sound terrible, possibly deadly. Sure hope I never see one. thanks Lee

Carrie Richards August 29, 2012 at 8:20 PM I have been there........the empty nest when my third child (my only daughter) left home......happy for her........miserable me...it is such a hard transition. Loved your poem! Lee Ramage August 30, 2012 at 10:53 AM Any advice on when the hurt stops?? Thanks so much for your kind comments Carrie, much appreciated. Lee

Delysia Hendricks August 26, 2012 at 9:33 PM Missing your daughter already, Lee? My children left home years ago. They live together and I speak to them separately just about daily. Nothing and nobody can replace a child in your house. Good contest entry, Lee. The very best of luck to you (on both scores). :) Lee Ramage August 27, 2012 at 2:27 PM Oh you really know what it is like. She adds sunshine to each day, and the occasional thunderstorm... ha,ha. Thanks Lee

Francine Roberts August 26, 2012 at 8:28 PM awesome job on this tough form , good luck in the contest Lee Ramage August 26, 2012 at 8:30 PM Thanks Francine. Appreciate your kind words. Lee