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Empty Chambers

Hello? …Here it is! It’s so cold in here.. ….. But the walls are still soft, …and the ceiling is higher than I remember….. It feels so still and morose. … Even my thoughts ..echo in here. I have not dropped in on this empty abode for a while. …. There seems never to be enough time…. Too busy. Look here.. and there …what a mess … ... Never did clean it up after she left. No wonder I never visit here . …..Wonder where she went after leaving this empty, abandoned heart of mine… …..It‘s so cold in here…. I’d better go now…. Lots to do.. Goodbye.

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Elizabeth Wesley

Date: 10/6/2011 3:53:00 PM

The heavy heart shows even though you go lightly through the verse. Has kind of a hollow feeling to it and I enjoyed the feeling.

Anne Rutherford

Date: 5/22/2011 3:35:00 PM

Sad Robert but we can see that there is light at the end of your poem.Superb writing.Anne

Joe Maverick

Date: 12/8/2010 3:31:00 PM

good write, memory time and space metaphor and the sense of loss Robert.makes me realize its a good thing to to have a strong will and determination, in this life.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/4/2010 5:33:00 PM

awww, a touch of sad nostalgia. Love it!! andrea

Phyllis Babcock

Date: 12/3/2010 8:24:00 AM

This is a sad and heart breaking poem. Empty is a place we do not want to visit. God Bless Phyl

Doris Culverhouse

Date: 12/2/2010 5:51:00 AM

funny, yet sad enjoyed today!

Yvonne Roberts

Date: 12/1/2010 12:55:00 PM

Hi, Robert I really enjoyed this poem, your approach is fascinating, when writing about love gone wrong, and life going on, also thank you very much for your comments regarding my poem, Edge of a tear, really means quite a lot to me.

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 12/1/2010 10:43:00 AM

We are having our first laying snowfall this morning in Springfield,Ohio. December 1,2010 what a way to enter this month. It is absolutely beautiful and finds me in good spirits. I have enjoyed reading your poetry this morning Robert. Looking forward to reading more. Have a wonderful day. Love, Carol

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 12/1/2010 9:41:00 AM

Really like your writing style, Rob. Always a good message that is easily perceived and enjoyed by the reader. Hope you entered this in the Empty Apartment contest. Surely a winner! Love and blessings, Carolyn

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 12/1/2010 8:07:00 AM

Very nice away to express self-introspective thoughts on the empty chambers, Robert

Wilma Neels

Date: 12/1/2010 3:50:00 AM

Robert, I love this, it is like you are talking with someone, but you are having a conversation with yourself if I am not mistaken.. Brilliant write my friend and so much enjoyed by me this afternoon ;) Wilma

Nette Onclaud

Date: 12/1/2010 12:34:00 AM

great phrasing and lovely descriptions of your theme, ribert! hope you can drop by in take a peek at my"one like one sky! " thanks warmest, nette

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 11/30/2010 9:24:00 PM

i kinda like the image i get of a person speaking and pausing,, enjoyed your write Robert..p.d.

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 11/30/2010 8:11:00 PM

Wow ..Robert this is a brilliant piece.. if for Matt's contest..good luck my friend.. its awesome ..enjoyed your sentiments in every line with luv..