Emptiness

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The silent house it's mouth firm and shut the crying eyes the trails of tears can't beat the mourning sky The silent man locked up inside he tracks the tears counts empty bottles cuts words from yellow newspapers In random order it now says: "evening chaos car prime-minister" He thinks this might become a masterpiece A lamenting poem about absolutely nothing. *** August 18, 2017 Copyright © Darren White

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Gregory Richard Barden

Date: 8/21/2017 4:53:00 AM

Very nice write, Darren ... as is all your work. Blessings.

Darren White
Date: 8/22/2017 12:53:00 AM

Thanks so much for the compliment Greg

Emile Pinet

Date: 8/20/2017 5:10:00 PM

You have a quick wit and an enviable imagination. Well done. Emile.

Darren White
Date: 8/20/2017 10:40:00 PM

Emile, thank you :)

Patricia Cresswell

Date: 8/19/2017 12:22:00 PM

The poem is a great write. The picture is emptiness plus.

Darren White
Date: 8/19/2017 11:50:00 PM

Pathicia, thank you :)

Dean Wood

Date: 8/18/2017 10:51:00 PM

Sad, lonely and . . . whimsical? I like your idea Darren. Random words about absolutely nothing. Here's a challenge, get them to rhyme. Have a great day friend, Dean

Darren White
Date: 8/19/2017 12:25:00 AM

I'll tell the man, it will be a real challenge for him :)