Empirical Deceitfulness

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Written: December 29, 2023 
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Mahogany motionless shadows
cast by deceitful sun,
a caterwaul unravels,
coeval betrayal
voice beckons glimpses 
—of anguish
within the heart loci,
once pure and corpulent,
now rapt by crestfallen darkness,
bereavement blight.
synchronous with aquifers
Interfluve ferri-crete... 
desultory. 

A love so tender,
akin to a fragile bloom,
now withered and wilted,
lost in the gloom,
a vow is broken
trust shattered in shards
of diaphanous slogans
leaving behind, disconsolate
heartbreak—real misery abounds.

In magenta shadows
cast by a deceitful sun,
whispers of deceit,
waltzed in the wind,
saffron sun rays
masked the spuriousness
in perfidy of truth,
as a venomous snake—slither
exposing whopper & 
taradiddle
causing hearts to wither

 
In depths of darkness,
truth did reside,
unveiling deceit,
where love once thrived,
a web of lies spun
entangling hearts
in a web of
perfidiousness
deviousness
guilefulness
& flimflam
how the heart weeps,
its innocence lost,
It once held love's warmth
betrayal wound is effusive.
 
A turbulent ocean
of bereavement
overwhelms this heart 
eviscerate...
& in egregious pain
no relief in sight
only an aching hole
despite sorrow 
mercilessly embraces
a glimpse 
of grace and hope,
yet, darkness... 
holds strength
empyreal resilience.

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Tom Woody

Date: 12/30/2023 4:32:00 PM

Those danged whoppers and taradiddles! Well, expose we must

Judy Ball

Date: 12/30/2023 10:15:00 AM

This is such and emotional piece. One feels the pain of rejected love and an abiding emptiness. Really good imagery here. Well Done my friend. God Bless and Happy New Year. JB

Ink Empress

Date: 12/30/2023 2:56:00 AM

Ah, this is brilliant and so profound and meaningful, how youve described what deceit could do to hearts that once thrived, in such captivating metaphors and lyrical alliterations. I love the flow of this moving write and also your wordplay here is impeccable and so very creative. Especially loved the lines “ crestfallen darkness,“ “ venomous snake—slither exposing whopper & taradiddle” soul hitting! How descriptive you are. “ A turbulent ocean of bereavement.. “ felt that! Nailed it. FAVE

Sara Kendrick

Date: 12/29/2023 1:52:00 PM

If for a contest, it reads like a good contender to me. Way to go. Thanks for sharing your lines with us and for dropping by my page. Sara K

Silent One

Date: 12/29/2023 11:49:00 AM

I loved this one.. masterfully employs a variety of poetic devices, including alliteration and vivid metaphors, to convey the intricate emotions of heartbreak and the aftermath of shattered vows. The progression of the verses, from the initial deceitful shadows to the unveiling of truth in the depths of darkness, unfolds a narrative of pain and loss. The choice of words like "taradiddle" and "flimflam" adds a touch of irony, highlighting the hollowness of the promises that once held weight...

Shadow Hamilton

Date: 12/29/2023 11:32:00 AM

I feel so brevet this poem reaches deep into the heart and tears it out by the roots excellent write Dear Sotto hugs Shadow