Emotional Whirlwind

Whirlwind eclipse of emotions shadow her descent Falling like a deflated balloon against the masons hand Crushed Love escapes her callused grasp Lay

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Robert A. Dufresne

Date: 3/13/2012 1:08:00 PM

I really like the tools you have used to bring about your message, Walayee. A write that brings the reader down with the writer falling and sharing a bruised history of love and it's escape through constant attempts ergo a callused grasp but not necessarily a callused heart ...At least that's my take on it. Well done! your talent shines through

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders

Date: 3/12/2012 8:29:00 PM

Amazing free verse...I am enjoying your beautifully poignant poetry the last couple days. Blessings, Rhonda

Laura Breidenthal

Date: 3/12/2012 6:22:00 PM

Awesome Free-verse! I love the structure; it really added some color to this fine write. Much enjoyed --- Always, Laura