Emotional Bars

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I gathered all of my dreams, frustrations, wishes, and fears. And stored them in a tower guarded by a moat of tears. Emotional bars won't let those guarded feelings escape. And a web of sticky lies prevents them from taking shape. Spanning the drawbridge of time; Hope has built a secret door. And beyond it lies a path; that leads me back to before. But I threw away the key needed to unlock that door. I'm locked in a memory, lost to time forevermore.

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Line Gauthier

Date: 2/25/2018 8:04:00 PM

Beautiful medieval imagery conjures in my mind, Emile. I love how you clearly state that the prison is created by oneself. I particularly love the image of "across the drawbridge of time" because it suggests mechanics of control. Superb.

Emile Pinet
Date: 2/26/2018 8:17:00 AM

Thanks so much Line, I do so appreciate your visits. Emile.

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders

Date: 6/21/2015 10:51:00 PM

Wonderful, heartfelt words that flow with wisdom...yes, sometimes it's best to just move on...hugs, Rhonda

Emile Pinet
Date: 6/22/2015 8:37:00 AM

Thanks Rhonda, I appreciate your support. Emile.

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 6/19/2015 4:10:00 AM

Dear Emile, I love the idea of your third stanza. Having a do over. My how we could change our lives. Great entry for the contest my friend.

Emile Pinet
Date: 6/19/2015 8:34:00 AM

Thanks Connie, I appreciate your friendly visits. Emile.

Laura Leiser

Date: 6/18/2015 6:16:00 PM

What a beautiful, emotive write, Emile, with the metaphor of emotional bars. So well done, and I KNOW you'll do well in this contest :)

Emile Pinet
Date: 6/19/2015 8:35:00 AM

Thanks Laura, I appreciate your kind words of support. Emile.

Jan Allison

Date: 6/18/2015 4:53:00 PM

Emile this is so charged with emotion and sadness but with hope for the future and loneliness is banished forever - and I love the accompanying image - good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx 7

Emile Pinet
Date: 6/19/2015 8:35:00 AM

Thanks Jan, as always I appreciate your friendly visits. Emile.