EMBERS AND SNOWFLAKES

No snow can ever fall without your memory punishing and pushing me into a dark reverie. Watching snow fall, I see your face, feel your touch and fade into a tangled web of sensory rush until I am bleak like snow when turned to mush. Snow of bright, gleaming thick layers reminds me of me when still truth spared. Then, when snow browns with man’s grime, I feel my heart bruises sharply combine. Making love in a remote cabin should not have happened, only the fire was not a lie. Your deceiving words of love’s design were words I believed as I gave my all to you. By fire, I submitted, pliant and fully subdued. As we lay entwined in love’s aftermath you stabbed me with words that attacked. As the fire cracked, my heart burned black. You spoke of your wife, your still married life, and confessed lying to get me in the sack. Smugly, you shared a hope I was okay with that. I could not speak, I felt only emotional smacks. Fire was the only sound when you fell asleep and a rage grew in me much to raw to keep. How strange to watch myself from outside myself, to see myself rendered into anger tremors as I rolled you into the fire’s splendor. I heard your screams muffled in fire’s temper until you were reduced to ash and embers.
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Dietrich Avatar
September 26, 2025 at 7:21 PM
I had commented to this one really well back in 2018. Yes, this is a very good one, Caycay
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January 6, 2018 at 8:32 PM
ohhh, Caycay, I LOVED the ending on this one. It was so MURDER MYSTERY good! Like those shows I enjoy watching on ID tv about liars and cheaters and love gone wrong. I was not expecting that twist at all. Well, I never got around to comments tonight, so you are my only poem to see and it was worth it. Off to my kitchen now. I have a lot of Soup to do tomorrow!!
Anish Avatar
January 4, 2018 at 9:25 PM
What a powerful - and unhappy ending. Hope this is fiction. Good job! Peace & Love Matthew Anish
Godwin Avatar
January 5, 2018 at 9:44 PM
Most definitely fiction, but then if I had murdered someone, I'd have to lie about it, wouldn't I? Just messing with you, it is pure fiction. Thank you for your comments, Matthew. All the best ... CayCay
Roper Avatar
January 2, 2018 at 8:07 PM
Nicely done, CayCay, a powerful emotional play . Good luck in the contest. Hugs Eve
Godwin Avatar
January 4, 2018 at 7:57 PM
Happy 2018!, I hope all is wonderful in your world so far this year. Thank you for your comments. Hugs ... CayCay
Allison Avatar
January 2, 2018 at 5:39 PM
WOW WOW WOW this is so so hot in so many ways ! I love the powerful ending he got more than his fingers burned and they do say hell hath no fury like a woman scorned . Bravo Caycay I am so glad to see its fiction!:-) hugs jan xx
Godwin Avatar
January 4, 2018 at 7:56 PM
You have never given me three wows and a bravo. I can retire now! Thank you, my friend - you've made my day. Hugs ... CayCay
Marcum Wong Avatar
January 2, 2018 at 2:38 PM
Holy cow! This is such a powerful expressive write CayCay! I know it is metaphoric in your last stanza, how betrayal reduced your budding romance to rubble because of the lies and his cheating heart. You took this contest of embers and snowflakes to whole other level of the most superb creativity I have seen in a long time! A Fave! I am blown away!!! : )
Godwin Avatar
January 4, 2018 at 7:55 PM
Unfortunately, I DID NOT mean his demise as metaphoric but as truly turning him into a crispy critter. I can see how you would have thought that. My first poem on murder, my friend, and I am so glad you found it creative. Been missing you and hope your 2018 is wonderful thus far! Love you ... CayCay
Smith Avatar
January 2, 2018 at 1:03 PM
That didn't go so well, wow, best wishes in the contest CayCay...
Godwin Avatar
January 4, 2018 at 7:53 PM
Hey, Charlie! No, not well at all, not when the end is the murder type of end. Thank you for the wow. All the best ... CayCay
Trifiatis Avatar
January 2, 2018 at 12:50 PM
Rage and bitterness wrapped in an impressive poetic blanket dearest CayCay! Happy New Year!
Godwin Avatar
January 4, 2018 at 7:52 PM
Thank you, Mr. Co-creator with God of beautiful flowers! I went with a dramatic fiction and it is the first time I ever wrote about murder. I hope it is okay that I had fun writing such. All the best, dear one ... CayCay
Blanca Avatar
January 2, 2018 at 10:41 AM
Yes, love hurts CayCay.
Godwin Avatar
January 2, 2018 at 10:47 AM
Hurts and sometimes, even burns. Though literally so is a no for me, only fiction in my case. All the best ... CayCay
May Avatar
January 2, 2018 at 10:21 AM
Wow.. A burning passion of deceit reduced to embers ...Great write CayCay...best wishes
Godwin Avatar
January 2, 2018 at 10:44 AM
Thank you, Joseph. It never fails to amaze me when an idea develops for a contest I thought had me stumped. Muses are such unpredictable brats. Glad to have you here. All the best ... CayCay
Tripp Avatar
January 2, 2018 at 10:21 AM
Ohhhh. The wrath of a woman scorned. Pretty hot red heat anger. Well written, my Dear.
Godwin Avatar
January 2, 2018 at 10:45 AM
Oh, yes, that burning wrath - horrible to feel like that. Thank you for your encouraging comments. All the best, Rhoda ... CayCay
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