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Elysium Soul Onset

 
Written: January 05, 2023
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As a river beckons
and brittle stripes 
of soaring reeds swell,
with a faint breeze
and a sturdy hedge,
the ebb and flow
of a loving swarm,
who humbly trickle
on an emerald ledge,
my spirit quivers
at sight of your hasty
adrift in vehemence,
full of enthusiasm,
fledgling, foolish scent.
aerial zephyrs are said,
to breathe a divine dream
upon receiving,
award of merit.

Can you pinpoint
every detail in
a seamless swerve
swaying stygian splits
in crystalline water
convey radiance 
or a wispy, hazy veil
wrapped in gnomes
rhythm, 
dance and chant
as twigs protrude 
from swaying rims,
suave souls supplied
a haven while time invades
wrests wonted words
as sapphire scrap.
epitome of sighs.

It's time for seraphic zeal 
in gauzy garments
and lunar anguish,
beseeching you with
a supple, soft cuddle
to bestow her boon,
pureness excites her.
to the brink of rapture,
leading lips to quiver
she merely dodges it,
as her grasp seeks to yield
a tender kiss, and
a loving curl of her lips.

5th place contest winner
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January 6, 2024 at 1:43 PM
Congratulations on your placement in the contest..
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January 6, 2024 at 7:24 AM
Lasaad, CONGRATS on your win with this smoothly flowing piece that vividly describes and personifies nature. Janice
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January 6, 2024 at 6:12 AM
Fine poetry my friend worthy of the accolades you receive. Splendid descriptions and imagery adorn your poetic creativity, Lasaad.
Empress Avatar
January 6, 2024 at 2:42 AM
Ah Dr sotto, what a brilliant free verse this is woven with such deep and intriguing metaphors and lines that flow in a seamless manner. I love so many lines in this especially how you’ve written “ my spirit quivers at sight of your hasty adrift in vehemence, full of enthusiasm, fledgling, foolish scent. aerial zephyrs ..merit” how heartfelt and touching is your way with expressing using descriptive imagery so vividly articulated for readers to appreciate in so many deep levels. Congratulations
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January 5, 2024 at 11:15 AM
Sotto my friend your poem weaves together nature, emotion, and mysticism, inviting readers to immerse themselves in a sensory experience while exploring themes of innocence, enthusiasm, and the complexities of human emotions. The language is rich and evocative, creating a tapestry of images and feelings that linger in the reader's mind... so poetically done..
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January 5, 2024 at 10:47 AM
Beautifully penned Sotto, I enjoyed the read
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