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  Written: January 05, 2023 ___________________________________________ As a river beckons and brittle stripes  of soaring reeds swell, with a faint breeze and a sturdy hedge, the ebb and flow of a loving swarm, who humbly trickle on an emerald ledge, my spirit quivers at sight of your hasty adrift in vehemence, full of enthusiasm, fledgling, foolish scent. aerial zephyrs are said, to breathe a divine dream upon receiving, award of merit. Can you pinpoint every detail in a seamless swerve swaying stygian splits in crystalline water convey radiance  or a wispy, hazy veil wrapped in gnomes rhythm,  dance and chant as twigs protrude  from swaying rims, suave souls supplied a haven while time invades wrests wonted words as sapphire scrap. epitome of sighs. It's time for seraphic zeal  in gauzy garments and lunar anguish, beseeching you with a supple, soft cuddle to bestow her boon, pureness excites her. to the brink of rapture, leading lips to quiver she merely dodges it, as her grasp seeks to yield a tender kiss, and a loving curl of her lips. 5th place contest winner 

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Date: 1/6/2024 1:43:00 PM
Congratulations on your placement in the contest..
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Date: 1/6/2024 7:24:00 AM
Lasaad, CONGRATS on your win with this smoothly flowing piece that vividly describes and personifies nature. Janice
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Date: 1/6/2024 6:12:00 AM
Fine poetry my friend worthy of the accolades you receive. Splendid descriptions and imagery adorn your poetic creativity, Lasaad.
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Date: 1/6/2024 2:42:00 AM
Ah Dr sotto, what a brilliant free verse this is woven with such deep and intriguing metaphors and lines that flow in a seamless manner. I love so many lines in this especially how you’ve written “ my spirit quivers at sight of your hasty adrift in vehemence, full of enthusiasm, fledgling, foolish scent. aerial zephyrs ..merit” how heartfelt and touching is your way with expressing using descriptive imagery so vividly articulated for readers to appreciate in so many deep levels. Congratulations
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Date: 1/5/2024 2:58:00 PM
dearest Sotto--your poem wowed me with its rich and evocative words and images! I experienced a range of emotions as I journeyed through your words. I enjoy and admire your poetic artistry. I truly believe that your mind and heart dwell in another creative plane...one that's rich and colorful. (I'm sincere in those words.) Wishing you a pleasant weekend, your poetess friend in Texas, Sara
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Date: 1/5/2024 11:15:00 AM
Sotto my friend your poem weaves together nature, emotion, and mysticism, inviting readers to immerse themselves in a sensory experience while exploring themes of innocence, enthusiasm, and the complexities of human emotions. The language is rich and evocative, creating a tapestry of images and feelings that linger in the reader's mind... so poetically done..
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Date: 1/5/2024 10:47:00 AM
Beautifully penned Sotto, I enjoyed the read
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