Elixir of Life

Elixir of life

How do you live your life?
Had you say, I live for myself
You are like big baby
Whose baby took to the sea bay
To drink from the long life pot
Whose seaside was it point
To live hundred years a year
Two hundred years two years

Big baby was becoming infant
When he walked, his back faced the firmament
His mouth wanted to kiss the ground
His legs were robust as though rotten wood

Big baby stood facing the long life jar
Told small kid to say at the rear
In respected distance
Not wanted him to have the experience
Of this mysterious and wonderful jar

Also not aware to the big kid
That it had never happened
Infant like him who had twice become newborn
Could not fetch water in the long life muddy pan

Small baby stood by the seaside
Just as he was told
Watching swooping and chirping of seabirds
Sea wave stooped and stood
Measuring it height with small kid
The sea was emitting pleasant cold
Caressing the soul of small kid
And now small kid was in another world
Relishing fondling and kissing of the sea cold:
So big baby was neglected
Like abandoned goal, which however
Would be embraced in the future

Big baby dipped hands in the pot
And then he pulled it out
But his hands were dried just as before
No traced of water
Yet the pot was full of water
He wondered
And again he dipped his hands
More and more and more
But his hands were dried just as before
No traced of water
Yet the pot was full of water
He wondered perhaps his hands
Could not fetch the water, but his rubbery lips
‘I shall dip my head in to this pot
I shall swig the water and empty the pot
I shall live long past Noah
History shall talk of me above Noah:
He had lived one fifty years
Before he started afresh-new youth-hood years
Maybe I shall live long
Long and long.
Perhaps I might not defunct
After emptying this long life pot
My boy shall die while I'm exist
I shall place him beneath soil of gold in zealot’


The rest will be posted latter. Thank you for reading me.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016



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Date: 11/4/2016 5:09:00 PM
Reaching for longevity in the sea o life...Nicely written...
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Afolabi Muideen
Date: 11/5/2016 6:12:00 AM
Thank you my friend, I appreciate your comment.
Date: 11/3/2016 8:16:00 PM
It seems like a great analogy you are doing to life, Afolabi. I must get off Soup now but hope to see the second part and how you end this one. You are such a thinker!!
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Afolabi Muideen
Date: 11/5/2016 6:11:00 AM
Thank you for the comment.
Date: 11/3/2016 2:49:00 PM
Afolabi, sometimes it's not the length of life, but the quality of life that is important. Your poem is filled with insight; perhaps you relate to the boy. When I felt old, my father used to tell me I would feel young again. I didn't believe him, but it's true. If we keep love and good will in our hearts, a long and promising life is possible. Excellent!
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Afolabi Muideen
Date: 11/3/2016 4:44:00 PM
thank you for taking your time to read and comment to my poem.
Date: 11/2/2016 6:11:00 PM
Wow, an amazing write. Waiting with anticipation for the rest.
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Afolabi Muideen
Date: 11/3/2016 4:41:00 PM
Thank you for dropping by, i appreciate your comment.
Date: 11/2/2016 2:49:00 PM
Interesting thoughts penned..Just doesn't happen that way though..Man wants the longevity though..Thanks for dropping by..Sara
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Afolabi Muideen
Date: 11/3/2016 4:34:00 PM
they forget that longevity of life is not important as meaningful. Thank you for dropping by.
Date: 11/2/2016 4:13:00 AM
Profound, provocative and didactic dear A.M! Keep up the inspiring writing my friend!
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Afolabi Muideen
Date: 11/3/2016 4:32:00 PM
thank you sir.
Date: 11/2/2016 2:38:00 AM
Excellent. Interesting write and well penned too. Thanks for sharing it.
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Afolabi Muideen
Date: 11/3/2016 4:02:00 PM
thank you
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