Elephant In the Room

A lack of oxygen, a stifled room
A pregnant pause, apparent gloom
Bitter sighs and angry growls
Upon her face "It's not my fault"
His wrinkled brow, "I'm not to blame!"

Past mistakes that hover now
Where pride as tough as elephant skin
Clinch the eyes where tears begin

While those who made a lover's pledge
Now teeter on the razor's edge
Behind closed doors heads shake about
And raging voices mutely shout
Mountains, molehills, vent and spout

Fingers point inside the fist
No one recalls what led to this
Closed minds,  resolved, and won't untwist

Raising questions one by one
Old ghosts that dangle, freely spun
A hopeless scene, what's left to gain?

No matter what,....they'll show no shame
What massive figure profoundly looms
as large as elephants in a room?
Copyright © | Year Posted 2009

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Thomas Avatar
April 7, 2018 at 5:49 PM
Carrie an astounding piece of work! Your choice of wording is brilliant and your flow is flawless!
Richards Avatar
April 8, 2018 at 8:01 PM
You are so kind, Thank you Shadow ! I had forgotten about this old poem written for a contest years ago. To be honest, I was surprised that it was picked for this weeks selection! It wasn't one that I meant to have featured. But appreciate your kind remarks :)
Leslie Avatar
April 7, 2018 at 12:10 PM
This is wonderful! Just great! ... one of my favs!
Richards Avatar
April 8, 2018 at 8:01 PM
You are very kind. Thanks so much !
Krutsinger Avatar
April 3, 2018 at 8:13 AM
I am too in awe to add mere words to this write. It is now on my fav list.
Richards Avatar
April 8, 2018 at 8:02 PM
What a lovely comment........thank you very much Caren!
Brumley Avatar
July 1, 2010 at 9:00 PM
Excellent poem wonderfully penned!
Clark Avatar
June 29, 2010 at 5:06 PM
Congratulations Carrie This was awesome!! Jeralynn
Guzzi Avatar
June 27, 2010 at 5:00 PM
LOL so funny! Loved it congrad's on your #1 win Light & Love
Ryerson Avatar
June 27, 2010 at 5:08 AM
How the heck did you manage to blend in those phrases and get it to rhyme also? (was that one of the requirements of the contest?) A first placer in my book too! - Tim
Culverhouse Avatar
June 25, 2010 at 11:32 AM
congrats on the big win!!
Brown Avatar
June 24, 2010 at 5:13 AM
Congratulations Carrie on your win in Paula Swanson's contest "Four Sentences". Love, Carol
Guzzi Avatar
June 23, 2010 at 1:54 PM
fantastic! and so true of so many family squabbles! Who's #1..why YOU!
Winter Avatar
June 23, 2010 at 9:43 AM
wow Carrie - just noticed this!!! awesome congrats on your well deserved First Place win!!! way to go!! love, shar xoxo
Taylor Avatar
June 22, 2010 at 9:03 PM
Congrats on your win, Carrie. Great write. xxx Ralph
Dillard Avatar
June 22, 2010 at 8:31 PM
Carrie, I've been to busy to write and just thought I'd check the soup. This certainly looked like a fun contest and you were stellar as always. Like I said, "you're the best!" RAY
Dietrich Avatar
June 22, 2010 at 7:19 PM
Hey, one I missed here! YOu did great with the four phrases. Good description as always, CArrie. Congratulations!
King Avatar
July 28, 2009 at 4:04 PM
The only distressing thing about an elephant is that it seems to know what you're thinking ... perfect description of a family row, Carrie. Thank you!
Strand Avatar
July 28, 2009 at 1:53 AM
Like the change of style with this on Carrie.Shows another aspect to your talent Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments
Goff Avatar
July 27, 2009 at 7:32 PM
ah, yes, forgiving oneself is hard.....your tomatoes sound delish! Carrie! I live in a condo at the moment, but have gardened voraciously in the past! AND WILL AGAIN!!! currently at my farmer's market, my favorite "cherokee purples" are in!!!! and thanks for your sweet comments! jimbo
Devonshire Avatar
July 27, 2009 at 10:56 AM
Great analysis of the awkwardness that accompanies subjects or thoughts we fear to convey -- those "elephans in the room." Very nice, Carrie! The title certainly caught my attention and you executed this beautifully. Love, Carolyn
Bird Avatar
July 27, 2009 at 10:55 AM
Great writing Carrie, and yes that so called pink elephant in the room standing there taunting us for things we have said and done, but, just remember friend, we are all human and although it seems hard to escape this elephant staring at us, it shall pass too. Great flow with this piece too! Thank you kindly Carrie, for your wonderful comments always appreciated.
Kendrick Avatar
July 27, 2009 at 10:05 AM
Interesting Rhyme,Carrie. Keep writing. Sara
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