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Elephant in the Room

A lack of oxygen, a stifled room A pregnant pause, apparent gloom Bitter sighs and angry growls Upon her face "It's not my fault" His wrinkled brow, "I'm not to blame!" Past mistakes that hover now Where pride as tough as elephant skin Clinch the eyes where tears begin While those who made a lover's pledge Now teeter on the razor's edge Behind closed doors heads shake about And raging voices mutely shout Mountains, molehills, vent and spout Fingers point inside the fist No one recalls what led to this Closed minds, resolved, and won't untwist Raising questions one by one Old ghosts that dangle, freely spun A hopeless scene, what's left to gain? No matter what,....they'll show no shame What massive figure profoundly looms as large as elephants in a room?

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009




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Date: 4/7/2018 5:49:00 PM
Carrie an astounding piece of work! Your choice of wording is brilliant and your flow is flawless!
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Carrie Richards
Date: 4/8/2018 8:01:00 PM
You are so kind, Thank you Shadow ! I had forgotten about this old poem written for a contest years ago. To be honest, I was surprised that it was picked for this weeks selection! It wasn't one that I meant to have featured. But appreciate your kind remarks :)
Date: 4/7/2018 12:10:00 PM
This is wonderful! Just great! ... one of my favs!
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Date: 4/8/2018 8:01:00 PM
You are very kind. Thanks so much !
Date: 4/3/2018 8:13:00 AM
I am too in awe to add mere words to this write. It is now on my fav list.
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Date: 4/8/2018 8:02:00 PM
What a lovely comment........thank you very much Caren!
Date: 7/1/2010 9:00:00 PM
Excellent poem wonderfully penned!
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Date: 6/29/2010 5:06:00 PM
Congratulations Carrie This was awesome!! Jeralynn
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Date: 6/27/2010 5:00:00 PM
LOL so funny! Loved it congrad's on your #1 win Light & Love
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Date: 6/27/2010 5:08:00 AM
How the heck did you manage to blend in those phrases and get it to rhyme also? (was that one of the requirements of the contest?) A first placer in my book too! - Tim
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Date: 6/25/2010 11:32:00 AM
congrats on the big win!!
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Date: 6/24/2010 5:13:00 AM
Congratulations Carrie on your win in Paula Swanson's contest "Four Sentences". Love, Carol
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Date: 6/23/2010 1:54:00 PM
fantastic! and so true of so many family squabbles! Who's #1..why YOU!
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Date: 6/23/2010 9:43:00 AM
wow Carrie - just noticed this!!! awesome congrats on your well deserved First Place win!!! way to go!! love, shar xoxo
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Date: 6/22/2010 9:03:00 PM
Congrats on your win, Carrie. Great write. xxx Ralph
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Date: 6/22/2010 8:31:00 PM
Carrie, I've been to busy to write and just thought I'd check the soup. This certainly looked like a fun contest and you were stellar as always. Like I said, "you're the best!" RAY
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Date: 6/22/2010 7:19:00 PM
Hey, one I missed here! YOu did great with the four phrases. Good description as always, CArrie. Congratulations!
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Date: 7/28/2009 4:04:00 PM
The only distressing thing about an elephant is that it seems to know what you're thinking ... perfect description of a family row, Carrie. Thank you!
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Date: 7/28/2009 1:53:00 AM
Like the change of style with this on Carrie.Shows another aspect to your talent Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments
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Date: 7/27/2009 7:32:00 PM
ah, yes, forgiving oneself is hard.....your tomatoes sound delish! Carrie! I live in a condo at the moment, but have gardened voraciously in the past! AND WILL AGAIN!!! currently at my farmer's market, my favorite "cherokee purples" are in!!!! and thanks for your sweet comments! jimbo
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Date: 7/27/2009 10:56:00 AM
Great analysis of the awkwardness that accompanies subjects or thoughts we fear to convey -- those "elephans in the room." Very nice, Carrie! The title certainly caught my attention and you executed this beautifully. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 7/27/2009 10:55:00 AM
Great writing Carrie, and yes that so called pink elephant in the room standing there taunting us for things we have said and done, but, just remember friend, we are all human and although it seems hard to escape this elephant staring at us, it shall pass too. Great flow with this piece too! Thank you kindly Carrie, for your wonderful comments always appreciated.
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Date: 7/27/2009 10:05:00 AM
Interesting Rhyme,Carrie. Keep writing. Sara
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