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Elements Part Three- Water Fairy


Everything was green and lush as I walked the hiking path,
little did I know that soon I would be hopelessly lost and
entangled by the forest with foliage impermeable.  I walked 
miles. Soon I was weary and so thirsty, I knew it was a requisite,
even perhaps death, I needed  water soon or die.  Suddenly a
needed precipitation, a sweet drizzle of cold rain falling on me from
twisted branches above in the tree canopy. I cupped my hands and drank.
Stillness surrounded me, not even the birds sang, all was quiet.
  

Pausing, I then heard the sound of water in the distance calling to me,
and I started to walk in that direction, energized by the thought of the coolness,
running through the thorns and decaying fauna, stopping and starting,
twisting and turning. I stood there panting listening and still hearing water.


Then I rested on the decomposing forest floor and fell asleep and dreamt . . .
How did I get to this lovely place of waterfalls and brilliant foliage and a 
river of icy blue flowing into a lagoon with flowers blooming and trees so green.
Every perfect thing you could image was before me.  I plunged into the lagoon,
exhilarated. How I needed the hydration and I drank to invigorate myself.

Wonderful sprays of serenity held me and I never wanted to leave,
and under the moon I swam and dived in the emerald blue iciness, but
then, I awoke and knew I was not of this realm anymore.  I was to be
eternally part of the icy blue, a water fairy dwelling in a beautiful lagoon,
reality gone, now I am the crystallization of water, a sweet hazy reverie.

From my watery grave, I whisper to you in dreams, come my lovely, come
and join me in the misty blue, oh it is magical where I dwell in water deep.
In my realm all is tranquil and peaceful and we can float free and calm,
rest your soul in my crispness all the night, come my lovely, come. I promise,
you can leave when you wish- or perhaps you will stay with me in the icy blue.

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April 1, 2016

Poetry/Acrostic/Elements Part Three-  Water Fairy
Copyright Protected, ID 16-773-743-0
All Rights Reserved.  Written under Pseudonym.

For the contest, Elements Part 3: Water
sponsor, Brian Davey

First Place
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016

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April 27, 2016 at 11:52 PM
Broken, Congrats on your win. XOX ~LINDA~
La France Avatar
April 28, 2016 at 7:46 AM
Linda, thanks for the congrats ~/
Rycroft Avatar
April 18, 2016 at 3:26 PM
Congrats on your win 1st xxxxxxxxxxxx
La France Avatar
April 24, 2016 at 10:01 PM
wendy thanks for the congrats xxxxx
Dutta Avatar
April 18, 2016 at 11:51 AM
Congrats BO to win top place. Love. Anisha D
La France Avatar
April 24, 2016 at 10:00 PM
anisha thanks for the congrats and love
Misra Avatar
April 18, 2016 at 2:53 AM
Congratulations, Broken. I can appreciate the superb lines you've written as I found it most difficult to put in all the hard words which had to be compulsorily inserted. I gave up after several attempts; but you've marvelously melded them all into your poe. Congrats, once again.
La France Avatar
April 24, 2016 at 9:59 PM
karam thanks for the congrats and the compliments appreciate
A. Sharma Avatar
April 17, 2016 at 10:16 PM
Congrats on superb top place win with this exquisite write Broken..
La France Avatar
April 17, 2016 at 10:30 PM
Upma thanks for the congrats and the exquisite !
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April 17, 2016 at 9:43 PM
Hi Broken Wings, What wonderful and enchanting imagery. And to make an acrostic out of it to boot is outstanding. Congrats on your well-deserved and very impressive 1st place win! Cheers, Brian
La France Avatar
April 17, 2016 at 10:03 PM
Brian, thanks for the wonderful and enchanting, I love those words, and thanks for the congrats !
Marcum Wong Avatar
April 17, 2016 at 7:30 PM
What a mystic journey your poem took me on Constance, filled with beautiful imagery. Congratulations on your super win my friend! Most deserving! # 7 :)
La France Avatar
April 17, 2016 at 9:07 PM
Connie, thanks for the visit and the congratulations and the 7 !
Haight Avatar
April 17, 2016 at 3:05 PM
Back to congratulate you on your well-deserved First Place win for your awesome poem, Broken Wings! Hugs, Sandra
La France Avatar
April 17, 2016 at 9:08 PM
Sandra, thanks for the congratulations and the awesome and hugs !
Allison Avatar
April 17, 2016 at 2:34 PM
gosh your imagination sure flowed here Constance many congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx
La France Avatar
April 17, 2016 at 9:09 PM
Jan, thanks for the congrats, oh yes my muse was on fire !
Roper Avatar
April 17, 2016 at 1:55 PM
Back to congratulate you on your great win!! Hugs Eve
La France Avatar
April 17, 2016 at 9:10 PM
Eve, thanks for the congratulations and the hugs !
Cheema Avatar
April 17, 2016 at 12:56 PM
Constance, your magical fingers work in accordance with your fascinating thoughts! A perfectly deserving placement! Congrats!
La France Avatar
April 17, 2016 at 9:11 PM
Balveen thanks for the compliment and the congrats !
Babu Avatar
April 17, 2016 at 12:01 PM
BW, Many Congrats on your TOP win!!!
La France Avatar
April 17, 2016 at 9:11 PM
Sathya, thanks for the congrats, appreciate !
Scars Avatar
April 17, 2016 at 11:28 AM
oh wow! this is great and worthy of a top placement! congrats on your win :)-luloo
La France Avatar
April 17, 2016 at 9:12 PM
Laura, thanks for the wow and the congrats !
Dietrich Avatar
April 17, 2016 at 10:45 AM
wow, Stellar win, Constance. BIG congrats to you. (I admire how you can do any contest. This one I just could not get my head around)
La France Avatar
April 17, 2016 at 9:13 PM
Andrea, thanks so much for the nice comment and the congrats !
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April 17, 2016 at 7:45 AM
Congrats on your superb win my lovely friend. Loved always, bl
La France Avatar
April 17, 2016 at 9:14 PM
BL, thanks for the congrats and the love !
Davey Avatar
April 17, 2016 at 6:10 AM
Congratulations Constance on a wonderful Water Fairy tale and on your top placement in my contest! Thank you for entering!
La France Avatar
April 17, 2016 at 9:15 PM
Brian, thanks for another great contest and I am very honored with my placement !
Roper Avatar
April 12, 2016 at 10:46 PM
You are fascinating your poem composure are just beautiful. Hugs Eve
La France Avatar
April 13, 2016 at 12:21 AM
Eve, thank you for the fascinating and the beautiful and the hugs !!!
Rycroft Avatar
April 4, 2016 at 6:00 AM
A very good use of the 6 words poem well written good luck in the contest x Wendy x
La France Avatar
April 5, 2016 at 2:47 AM
Wendy, thanks for visiting !
Hicks Avatar
April 2, 2016 at 1:59 AM
Very magical tone to this poem, BW, with interesting water images that felt quite immersive, reading though. Still debating on where to take this challenge ... the six requirement words are a bit difficult to work with methinks, as they are words I've never used in a poem before. You've done it well though.
La France Avatar
April 2, 2016 at 12:55 PM
Thanks for visiting.
Haight Avatar
April 1, 2016 at 8:05 PM
A lovely, enchanting story written with amazing flow, BW, one wouldn't guess it was an Acrostic! Beautiful, 7! All the best for the contest. Hugs, Sandra
La France Avatar
April 1, 2016 at 8:11 PM
Sandra, thanks for the compliment, I like to sort of hide my acrostic, not be so obvious, thanks for the beautiful, the 7 and the hugs ~
Spagnola Avatar
April 1, 2016 at 5:32 AM
Best of luck Constance!..you have penned an adventure in perfect form...I bet your soul looks a lot like your angel:)..with love, jill
La France Avatar
April 1, 2016 at 8:12 PM
Jill, thanks for visiting my poem with that sweet comment, appreciate so much !
Dietrich Avatar
April 1, 2016 at 1:21 AM
wow, you really let your imagination flow here, Constance. FLOWED like the crystal water that you eloquently described. This has GOT to be a winner!!
La France Avatar
April 1, 2016 at 8:13 PM
Andrea, thanks for the nice comment and compliment, oh yes, the muse was on fire ~
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