Elegy Over the Death of An Unrequited Lover

He lay dampened
By his overflowing emotions,
His touch buried him
Even deeper inside,
Every breath seemed heavy
And every memory
Beat him to his core;
The pain lashed at him,
He sought the Divine
Wanting nothing but the Light--
The light of true faith,
Expecting at any moment
For something to change...

But nothing seemed to happen:
The Gods seemed to mock him--
Laugh at his being--
His wishes were never granted:
 
Sinking as a ship--
Tormented as a boat on troubled waters,
And still holding on
To the last vestiges of some belief...
Hoping it would change
To something that would save him
From being buried,
From drowning--
He was burning
In his depths...
Though his feelings dampened the effect,
He struggled still in pain
Writhing, and finally tried to rise
But was strangled
By the same desire for a certain truth;
The impossible never happened
And he left in dismay:
He died a painful death in faith...

The divine intervention was all he wanted,
A return of emotions was what he sought;
A struggle was all he repented,
For Peace he never got;
His wishes went away in the coffin
With questions he could never ask;
The last of the nails looked heavily laden,
Was beaten into his cask....

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012



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Date: 3/5/2012 12:49:00 PM
Congratulations on your super win Akash. Love, Carol
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Date: 3/4/2012 10:30:00 PM
I couldn't let this go without a win. I don't know if I would be the best person to judge this because I know just how this feels. This poem really took me back to those years I spent in a state of limerence for something I could never have...hoping against all reason that the skies would open up and grant me some release. I hope you're doing alright, and I hope you get all the emotions you need to out with your wonderful poems!  -KMD
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Date: 2/26/2012 9:07:00 AM
very unique... gr8 write....~sashi
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Date: 2/25/2012 3:46:00 PM
Very strong poetry you have penned here. Enjoyed. Michael
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