Electricity

Electrical power 
surges
through my body,
sending high voltage waves
to my brain,
shocking me
to my core.
The beats 
are pulse pounding.
Raw energy 
flows 
through
my veins.
Flashes of rhythm
like a neon sign,
glowing
out from the darkness.
Lightning strikes
of pure power,
raging into fire.
Flames amplified by octane.
Burning away my soul,
until the smoke rises.
And I am lost in it.


Written by: Kelly Deschler
October, 14, 2013
For Nette Onclaud's contest - Groove It!
Heavy Metal

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013



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Date: 6/3/2014 5:59:00 AM
this rocks!!!!! i feel the heat and intensity increasing with each line.. :)!!!! i like it..... :)
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 6/4/2014 5:25:00 PM
Thank you very much for stopping by, Olive. It's so cool that you felt the electricity of this poem! :)
Date: 5/23/2014 4:20:00 PM
Very admirably depicted write on Electricity. I somewhat felt eels nearby while reading this, which is very good because the imagery was very real and effective. Loved this Poem.
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 5/25/2014 3:01:00 PM
Thank you so much, Ivo. I'm happy that you enjoyed it.... This poem was written on the theme of music, and I chose heavy metal. The description of electricity is how I feel when I listen to that kind of music. I'm glad that you felt it, because that was what I hoped would happen when people read this!
Date: 1/6/2014 4:10:00 PM
A refreshing take on the topic! fav [line flames amplified by octane ]Light & Love
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 1/8/2014 5:24:00 PM
Thank you, Debbie! I am glad that you enjoyed this one.
Date: 12/15/2013 6:25:00 PM
This poem has the power and passion of eletricity, WOW I felt the emotion in this write great job. and yes i do love father christmas lol. cheri
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Date: 12/15/2013 1:03:00 PM
Kelly This is an electrifying and charged up write. You sent a lot of energy and power through every line. Better not get too close to you or I might get shocked. LOL Nice job Thanks for the awesome comment on my Others Misery poem Hugs
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Date: 10/30/2013 12:25:00 PM
Kelly, , enjoyed your GROOVE IT win............. ~LOVE SKAT~
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Date: 10/28/2013 10:13:00 PM
Raw power in your words, refined nicely in poetry. Nailed it! CTB
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Date: 10/28/2013 11:58:00 AM
Hi Kelly... congratulations on your win...LINDA
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Date: 10/28/2013 10:20:00 AM
And we are lost in the lines, of a smokin' hot poem........love it, Kelly!! Congratulations!!
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Date: 10/28/2013 7:51:00 AM
Congrats on the win in the contest, kelly
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Date: 10/27/2013 8:29:00 PM
I could feel the vibrations...congrats on your win :)
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Date: 10/17/2013 4:16:00 PM
electrically beautiful piece
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Date: 10/17/2013 4:01:00 PM
Wow excellent poem with deep meaning. Thanks for your noble visit and congrats on your win. Love n hugs
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Date: 10/17/2013 9:39:00 AM
Excellent! I condone a strong Metal sound. Love the ending!
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Date: 10/17/2013 2:50:00 AM
Love the mental image. Good job
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Date: 10/17/2013 1:55:00 AM
thank you, kel.. SOUP MAIL!..:) huggs
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Date: 10/15/2013 6:26:00 PM
Interesting work..Enjoyed reading your contest entry this eve..Thanks for the visit to my page..Your comments were uplifting..Sara
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Date: 10/15/2013 11:05:00 AM
Oh you sure Rock, this is amazing visual poetry.....
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Date: 10/15/2013 12:08:00 AM
yes!!! This would certainly be heavy metal!!! Way to go electric.
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Date: 10/14/2013 7:16:00 PM
You have perfectly described the untamed side of such power. Control elements can render such power beneficial to artists and engineers.... I suspect you have witnessed both..... Great work, as usual... Hugs, dear one.... Jake
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Date: 10/14/2013 6:20:00 PM
† Wow, You Know I Was Listening Unto A Crowded Soccer Stadium's Vibrant Spectators As Fans A Couple Of Evenings Past Now, Sweet Precious Kelly ˜ My Spirit Felt This Wisp In Wind So To Speak ? Somewhat Ominus Towards These Darker Elements Amid Humanity Likened As Unto Her Energy Within A Lightning Bolt ? Similar Unto A Heavy Metal Etc., Rock Concert Or Even Perhaps The Coliseum During Ancient Rome's Gladiator Bouts ? Also, I Had A Profound Dream A Bit Back Of Such Power Divine * Ten Trillion Times Multiplied ˜ Love, John
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