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'eerie Eyes'

spotted shadows eerie eyes encapsulate brave bats in cave *having a go at an alliterative haiku, took me forever I know* lol Ps: Chris, contest closed long before I finished this one guys, just figured it would be nice to give it a go :)

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Kash Poet

Date: 3/17/2011 12:00:00 PM

I missed this excellent Haiku of You Wilma---wonderful write---kashinath

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 3/13/2011 9:02:00 AM

An excellent try Wilma and a wonderful one too... keep on tap for next Alliteration contest luv.. u get an "A" for excellent effort..luv..

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 3/12/2011 7:18:00 PM

oooo! sounds creepy.. in that cave... sad you missed the contest,, enjoyed your poem... p.d.

Jack Horne

Date: 3/9/2011 12:17:00 PM

very spooky - love it : ) Jack

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 3/7/2011 10:27:00 PM

eek, eek, I think those eyes are staring at me O.O.... way to go for you for trying out alliterative haiku -- it sure can be a challenge :)- - and uh-oh, missy you are sleeping at wee hours in the morning now?? tsk, tsk! not good at all --- hugs to you missy, hope you're not a zombie like me?

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/7/2011 6:58:00 AM

I like the great picture that it depicts, Wilma!

James Fraser

Date: 3/6/2011 2:52:00 PM

I must investigate this alternative Haiku and give it a try after reading your gem Wilma. Good luck in Chris's contest....:)

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 3/6/2011 2:32:00 PM

This is really great, Wilma! I love the image you painted of the bats' eyes encapsulated by shadows. You succeeded where I failed. I could not come up with an "alliterative haiku" for the life of me -- spent a lot of time trying. Hope you get a big win in the contest! Love, Carolyn

Michael J. Falotico

Date: 3/6/2011 1:05:00 PM

But you nailed , no surprise at all... Beautiful eerie images.. well done my dear...love from me to you always Michael