Edenical Clutch

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Branches of a bonsai on canvas resembled two figures with feet touching. The full light of the moon shone from the corner.


Edenical clutch
Adam & Eve bonsai
bare side of moon
it’s bright and sinless light
seems a world away

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Gershon Wolf

Date: 7/29/2024 7:32:00 PM

So true -- worlds away. Sadly...

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/29/2024 7:46:00 PM

Sadly so…

Paige Hind

Date: 7/29/2024 4:56:00 PM

A fav for this one, too. Very haunting, left me in awe those five little lines....

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/29/2024 7:46:00 PM

Thank you kindly! :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/28/2024 10:18:00 PM

Wow I really like this. The last two lines are stunning, Kim

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/29/2024 6:08:00 AM

Thank you, Andrea! I was inspired by a piece of art. Blessings :)

Tom Woody

Date: 7/28/2024 5:29:00 PM

This ain't yer average tanka, fosho. Unique poem Kim, as we have come to expect from you

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/29/2024 6:07:00 AM

Thank you so much, Tom! :)