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Eclipsed Ring

Put me on your finger, like the faded ring Eclipsed, amidst the sun, against your skin Casting dark cages, incarcerating the moonlight Of your burning desires, and the maddened grin Of evil, exposing nefarious doubts veiled from sight; Put me on your finger, for I am; the light You've always desired, but failed to dance in..

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Beata Agustin

Date: 11/24/2023 2:58:00 AM

Thanks for sharing this... exposing your thoughts through your unique poetic style. Meanwhile, I greet you with the love of the Lord, expressed by John 3:16 of the Bible, "For God so loved the world, that he gave his only begotten Son, that whosoever believeth in him should not perish, but have everlasting life." Be blessed.

Skat A

Date: 5/4/2016 11:45:00 AM

Shafi Ullah, I'm just here visiting your poem once again. If you ever return to post, I'd like to come back to read your newest. Happy Days **SKAT**

Cadyson Horton

Date: 2/23/2016 6:47:00 AM

it could have had more detail. this was an easily broken down poem, make it more hard.

Shafi Ullah
Date: 4/5/2016 12:13:00 AM

Thank you Cadyson; will surely consider that :)

Cadyson Horton
Date: 2/23/2016 6:47:00 AM

but it was still an amazing poem

Robert Heemstra

Date: 2/22/2016 2:43:00 PM

Nicely done!

Shafi Ullah
Date: 4/5/2016 12:17:00 AM

Thanks Robert :)

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 12/25/2015 1:33:00 PM

Shafi, WELCOME to poetry soup. I hope you have fun with this wonderful community. You'll find many friendly poets who are ready to support and give positive feedback. I will enjoy following you and your poetry :) We are Lucky To Have you. Enjoy Poetry Soup:) Your New Poet Friend @-> LINDA <-@

Shafi Ullah
Date: 4/5/2016 12:19:00 AM

Thank you Linda. I'm looking forward to reading good poems, and sharing what I can, while I last.

Skat A

Date: 12/24/2015 9:15:00 AM

Hi Shafi, Welcome to Poetry Soup. It will be a delight to read and become familiar with your poems in the future. As for now, I will greet you with the same smile others passed when I first joined the soup. Wishing you and your poetry the best. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here STARTING with me- SKAT :-) Please drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you wish. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND" Hugs* SKAT

Shafi Ullah
Date: 4/5/2016 12:19:00 AM

Thank you SKAT, I do hope the same :)