Lin Lane Poet Rhyme

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Echoes of Death's Call

From depths of fear she hovers on a chair to escape
   No place of concealment found behind window or door
      Curse the creeping shadows crawling all over the floor

Whispers softly, lest phantoms catch her sleeping
   Wild eyes of terror from which tears no longer fall
      The woman continues to hear echoes of death's call

Scant the clothes she wears;  phobia of blood stains
   On her feet, socks of purest white, worn perpetually
      to signal the flow; another tide of a carnage red sea

Upon the chair she trembles, safe circle above the floor
   Her climb up the crevices of the abyss is hard to visualize
      and far beyond my capability to comprehend or scrutinize


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                                2/23/16 
  Visualize-Scrutinize-Remark Contest: Malta Forever

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Balveen Cheema March 17, 2016 at 8:49 AM Lin, that's a winderful write! Congrats! Lin Lane March 17, 2016 at 9:04 AM Thanks, Balveen.

Teddy Kimathi March 17, 2016 at 3:57 AM A wonderful way of creating a dark plot in this sensual theme..... Congrats Lin, for your placement in the contest!!! ;-) Lin Lane March 17, 2016 at 6:26 AM Thanks, Teddy.

Dr. Upma A. Sharma March 16, 2016 at 11:09 PM Wonderful write n win Lin.. big congrats! Lin Lane March 17, 2016 at 6:25 AM Thank you, Upma.

Charlie Smith March 16, 2016 at 8:11 PM Good work well deserved placement... Lin Lane March 16, 2016 at 10:00 PM Thank you, Charlie.

Sam Jameson March 16, 2016 at 6:53 PM I like the take, Lin-- written with some darker, shadowy emotion but I still feel hope for the heroine... congrats on your placement :) Lin Lane March 16, 2016 at 7:20 PM Thanks so much, Sam.

Rob Carmack March 16, 2016 at 5:02 PM Of the top 4, this is my favorite. Congrats Lin. Lin Lane March 16, 2016 at 5:10 PM I guess that means I'm one of those. Thanks so much for the nice compliment, Rob. I need to take a look.

Richard Lamoureux March 16, 2016 at 4:57 PM Well done, love the imagery. Congrats on your placement. Lin Lane March 16, 2016 at 5:09 PM Thanks so much, Rick.

Beautiful Scars March 16, 2016 at 4:32 PM Lin congrats on your placement in the contest...a wonderful take on the contest I love it. ..:)-luloo Lin Lane March 16, 2016 at 5:09 PM Thanks much, Luloo, I'll have to take a look at the list.

Daniel Turner March 16, 2016 at 3:26 PM Excellent take on the prompt, Peaches. Congratulations on your winning write. Peace my dear friend:) Lin Lane March 16, 2016 at 5:08 PM Thank you, Danny. I haven't read what's on the placement list, but I will soon.

Scott Thirtyseven February 27, 2016 at 12:30 PM That "phobia of blood" really takes us some dark places. And "... carnage red sea", lovely words. Best of luck in the contest. Lin Lane February 27, 2016 at 12:36 PM I didn't hesitate for a minute when I saw the picture to be used. I don't like writing about dark places, but she is definitely in one. Thanks for your detailed comments, Scott.

Justin Bordner February 23, 2016 at 9:28 PM Our very own flesh can frighten the invincibility of the heart, nerves of love shocked by the blood of beauty...your strange and analytically sexy poem evokes circus dare in me Poetess. "Whispers softly lest phantoms catch her sleeping..." awesome! J.A.B. Lin Lane February 23, 2016 at 9:49 PM Hi, Justin. Your in depth comments are very analytical as well. Thank you for being specific and for liking this one.

Jill Spagnola February 23, 2016 at 3:44 PM Along with your visual, it show and tells of someone sadly Terrified..I can feel it! Lin Lane February 23, 2016 at 3:48 PM I was torn between two reasons for her terror, but I'll keep them to myself in case others would like to give their interpretation. Thank so much for returning with another comment. lol it really gripped you.

Jill Spagnola February 23, 2016 at 3:42 PM Wow Lin! This piece has left me agape and deeply moved. :), jill Lin Lane February 23, 2016 at 3:46 PM I felt her fear when I first saw the image provided. Thanks for expressing your emotions, Jill.