Echoes

Play with pleasure, Opt for the best; Ink sure measure, Glimpse treasured zest; Now and again, Align pure heart; Niche cheery strains, Taste bounty's start. Expect great sights, Charm leads the way; Heed profound light, Observe fine sway; Each on a trip, Sense pulse that skips. Leon Enriquez 23 October 2014 Singapore

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Paul Callus

Date: 10/26/2014 5:44:00 AM

Thank you Leon for the explanation; I understand what you mean. Many poetic forms have been altered during the passage of time and the same applies to sonnets. This is your own type of sonnet and one day people might refer to it as "Singapore Sonnet"! // paul

Leon Enriquez
Date: 10/26/2014 10:14:00 AM

Dear Paul: Thanks. Leon

Paul Callus

Date: 10/25/2014 2:27:00 PM

Leaving sonnet merits aside....it still makes for an interesting read in which rhyme makes its presence felt. Have a nice weekend Leon. // paul

Leon Enriquez
Date: 10/25/2014 11:34:00 PM

Dear Paul: Thank you for your kind words and understanding. I feel the need to explain why I consider this as a sonnet -- in fact, a mini-sonnet of sorts. It's been 400 years since Mr Shakespeare borrowed this form from the Italian verse form and regularized the iambic pentameter. To capture the essence with lesser syllables, I've tweaked the 10 syllables down to four which suits my purposes. Calling it a sonnet is just for convenience. That's my take on this old verse form. I think the spirit of the write is what really matters. Hope this helps. Thanks for the support. Leon

Charles Reese

Date: 10/23/2014 11:32:00 AM

you have the rhyme of an english sonnet but not the meter. this style requires 10 iambic syllables per line. As is it is not a sonnet.

Leon Enriquez
Date: 10/23/2014 11:38:00 AM

Dear Charles: Thank you. Leon