Dusk

Dusk settled on light green trees
Timid mongoose peeped
Padded feet in the alley
Cool breeze thru leaves seeped
 It started to feast
On old canned fish and stale meat
Stars twinkles in east


27/9/12
BY-Tahera Mannan
Contest- Wonder Of Dusk In Seguidilla

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/27/2012 5:32:00 PM

wow, this is very lovely and I liked the realism thrown in with the old canned fish for that mongoose.

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 9/27/2012 8:58:00 AM

A VIVID CANVAS PAINTED WITH IMPRESSIVE IMAGERY TAHERA .. WINNING WISHES LUV ..

Kash Poet

Date: 9/27/2012 4:22:00 AM

Very good approach for Nette's contest.A great entry Tahera.Best wishes to you.

Robert Pettit

Date: 9/26/2012 11:34:00 PM

I would hardly consider a mongoose a "timid" animal. They are quick, cunning, and vicious predators who will take on a snake that's many times their weight. However, this is a decently descriptive free verse poem.