Duplex

We had the sun We had the sun when our love was brand new When each day was a dream, when you cherished the view Then came the rain, when my tears filled the sky When you pulled back your heart, when you whispered goodbye There was no moon, when the darkness had died When there were no more stars, when the heavens had cried Where is the sky when I can’t seem to see As my heart breaks apart because you’re not with me
12/06/16 Written for the Duplex poetry contest Sponsored by Jan Allison Syllable count checked on Soup's syllable counter
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Haight Avatar
December 11, 2016 at 8:01 PM
A full story made up of two-syllable lines that flow so beautifully, Chris! Congrats on your fine placement. Sandra
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December 12, 2016 at 8:37 AM
Thanks so very much Sandra, I am so glad you liked it.
James Avatar
December 11, 2016 at 11:17 AM
great flow indeed! well done Chris
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December 12, 2016 at 8:36 AM
Thanks so very much James
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December 11, 2016 at 5:00 AM
Hi Chris, I knew I would find you on the winning list! Congratulations on your win. It was well deserved: -) Alexis
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December 12, 2016 at 8:36 AM
Thanks so very much my sweet friend. I appreciate your kind words.
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December 10, 2016 at 11:57 PM
I am singing indeed, coming back to you with congratulations :)
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December 12, 2016 at 8:36 AM
Thanks so very much Darren. Feel free to stop by and sing anytime. :)
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December 10, 2016 at 7:55 PM
Congrats on your win, Chris. I love how you make the poem flow so that one does not even notice the two syllable-per-line format.
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December 12, 2016 at 8:35 AM
Thanks so very much Agnes. I am thrilled it touched you that way. It wasn't easy to write, I am happy you enjoyed it
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December 10, 2016 at 6:21 PM
Such a beautiful flow to your poem :-) I wasn't surprised to see your name on this particular poem Chris:-) many congrats:-) hugs Jan xx
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December 12, 2016 at 8:35 AM
Thanks so very much Jan. I am happy you liked it.
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December 7, 2016 at 9:37 AM
Soo good Chris, should do well in the contest.
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December 7, 2016 at 9:52 AM
Thanks so much John. I don't know about that, I have read a few today that have just blown me away. But I appreciate you saying so.
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December 7, 2016 at 6:02 AM
Heartwrenching exceptional sad poem..of absence..longing and goodbye.A fave.
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December 7, 2016 at 9:51 AM
Thank you so very much my sweet friend. I appreciate your kindness always.
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December 7, 2016 at 4:33 AM
What a great tempo, bittersweet never sounded so good. Good luck Chris.
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December 7, 2016 at 9:51 AM
Thanks so very much Paloma. I am happy you liked this one.
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December 7, 2016 at 1:14 AM
Wonderful Chris, it reads like a song! Good luck in the contest :)
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December 7, 2016 at 9:50 AM
Thanks so very much Darren. Hey feel free to sing along if you like. :)
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December 6, 2016 at 9:53 PM
Nicely done Chris! Great flow! Best wishes in the contest. Big Hugggs. Cap'n Deb
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December 7, 2016 at 9:50 AM
Thanks so very much Cap'n Deb. I am happy you liked this one.
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December 6, 2016 at 9:01 PM
Beautiful poem, Chris. Very moving and filled w/such emotion. Has the flow of life issuing from your pen. Such is life, eh. Love this poem a whole lot. Much love to you, bruh.
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December 7, 2016 at 9:49 AM
Thanks Freddie, this was a difficult one to write, not so much the theme, I've been there before but the format. I'm glad you enjoyed this one.
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December 6, 2016 at 5:34 PM
Hi Chris, You have penned a well written piece . I see your unique style through out the piece. It looks like a winner to me. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. A without a doubt seven:-) Alexis
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December 6, 2016 at 5:37 PM
Thanks so very much Alexis. I'm not sure about all of that but I am happy you liked it.
Sands Avatar
December 6, 2016 at 4:43 PM
Well written Chris. I can feel the sadness and heartbreak. Good luck in the contest!
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December 6, 2016 at 4:50 PM
Thank you so very much my sweet friend. I am happy you liked this.
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December 6, 2016 at 4:28 PM
A wonderful poem Chris, top class. Good luck.
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December 6, 2016 at 4:46 PM
Thanks so much Gary.
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