Drunk

This thing about drinking your problems away…it’s a myth I am still having the problem…my cheating mate, he’s still living here, after 3 bottles of rum The girl he cheated with, I think she has moved in my house... his mistress…yes and before the drink ,I had no idea who she was or what she looked like but now after a few drinks she sitting here next to me in 3D with full effects ...I had no idea what her name was but she has now introduced herself Does this bottle of rum comes with sound effects...she's telling me how good he was in bed , I don’t remember asking but I guess I did I now see why he cheated ...wow… from this position on the floor, she looks better than I do ...it's a myth drinking don’t take the problems away it just comes in full effects, colour and all… in 3D…I am drunk

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Doug Vinson

Date: 12/2/2016 12:19:00 PM

Sonya, interesting and surprising. : )

Doug Vinson
Date: 12/2/2016 10:35:00 PM

Okay, I do see know, and yes - some people get mean and crazy when they drink.

Sonya Stewart
Date: 12/2/2016 7:44:00 PM

drinking enlarge the problem ...when you are drunk you see more that the issue...remember your imagination start running

Doug Vinson
Date: 12/2/2016 7:18:00 PM

At first, I expected your poem to really just be saying, "Drinking is bad." Yet at the end of the poem, you are more understanding of the drunk, and you say "it's a myth drinking don’t take the problems away..." OR - did you mean, ""it's a myth, drinking don’t take the problems away..."

Sonya Stewart
Date: 12/2/2016 2:48:00 PM

I have not drink in years really and now I am only drink water but everyone tells me drinking help. but please tell me what is interesting and what was surprising

Doug Vinson
Date: 12/2/2016 12:42:00 PM

Well - of course drinking does not take the problem away. It makes many problems worse, and makes problems of its own. I do think it can provide inspiration for writers, though - and I realize that many will disagree with me. I see it altering the mind a little, lowering inhibitions.

Sonya Stewart
Date: 12/2/2016 12:23:00 PM

did you get a laugh...I always hear drinking take the problem away and I just don't understand how so I was playing with it