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No-one has to die As the waters swirl around Your feet are trapped Or so you think Your epitaph 'They Drowned' You feel your neck is stretching Your fate soon to conclude But honestly, I see you So without meaning To be rude Take my hand or grab the rope It's not that far away When fear or pride Might stop you.. Live to fight another day Don't feel you're obligated There is no salvation charge Just arms length from a rescue Whether speedboat, jet-ski, Barge The vehicle doesn't matter It's intent that you should see No inclination to be tethered You can walk away Scott-free Your lungs can breathe No version where this let's you slip away Let the peaceful air Restore you No-one has to die today Samsun Scott 13th September 2023

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Date: 9/14/2023 7:21:00 AM
Very well written, Sam, "no one has to die today" - we just need to reach out for help:)
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Date: 9/14/2023 7:31:00 AM
It's a message of love and a message of community.. thank you Joanna - this means a lot :)
Date: 9/14/2023 2:26:00 AM
A very deep poem, i find you as a very versatile poet, that can write about anything and everything and still leave an impression. This poem did just that too. The way you’ve reminded us readers to fight for light, when everything seems overwhelming, how and where and when doesnt matter, how far we reach too doesnt, as long as you remind yourself to not give up: and receiving help isnt bad, allow yourself to be picked up too! Brilliant poem . Loved this
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Date: 9/14/2023 2:30:00 AM
That is a very insightful and wise observation IE. Asking for help (especially for men it seems) is perceived as weakness and yet truthfully it is a sign of strength. You encourage me greatly. I do thank you :)
Date: 9/14/2023 12:18:00 AM
I was feeling like this a few weeks ago and for no apparent reason, I did just that and grabbed at anything to start that pull out of despair and am back where I started now, a good place. Excellent writing, Scott
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Date: 9/14/2023 12:21:00 AM
I like to think there is always a rope or a helping hand when we find ourselves in that place. Thank you for your kindness :)
Date: 9/13/2023 4:38:00 PM
Many times, the person fearing drowning fights the person there to save them, at times causing the death of both people. I really like the line, "When fear or pride Might stop you.. Live to fight another day". So many times in life I've had to pay an enormous price because of ego and/or pride. Thank you for sharing your thoughts with us through your poetry, Sam. A poet friend in Texas, Bill p.s. thanks for following my poet.
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Date: 9/13/2023 4:44:00 PM
Thanks for the resonance, Bill. We all need a helping hand sometimes and it can come in surprising, unexpected packages. Keep writing :)

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