Drop

Before you cut your wrist within a silver wink wait- Drop the knife! Don't let your life Lie at the mercy of your dripping blood where every crimson droplet trickles against the black mantle of your subconscious Making your vision round and round towards the spiral of void's sinister smile Till all is dark! If you want to see the light Oh please Drop the knife...

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Kurt Kohls

Date: 6/25/2010 12:47:00 AM

juan, thank you for your comment.. I really enjoyed this..dark with great imagery "towards the spiral of voids sinister smile" thats superb!! ...good stuff here...Kurt

Sharon Tideswell

Date: 6/19/2010 6:36:00 AM

Wow Juan, great writing. A real attention grabbing first line, and the rest is equally as effective. Your choice of phrase is wonderful. Well done ~ Sharon :)

Michael J. Falotico

Date: 6/19/2010 5:46:00 AM

you got everyones attention with this one... well written and Im glad you enjoy my work..I write from within sometimes good and sometimes not so good lol...Michael

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 4/29/2010 7:18:00 AM

Yes, we must "drop the knife" when we feel compelled to end our lives. As you say in your wonderful poem, facing our struggles is the path to "the light." Some folks really need to hear this inspirational message. Thank you for posting it. Best wishes, Carolyn

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/28/2010 8:58:00 PM

Hey, this is pretty good, Juan. Nice to see you here. I like this poems' way of getting someone to drop the knife! Luv, andrea

Doris Culverhouse

Date: 4/28/2010 7:11:00 AM

Enjoyed--very uplifting. I noticed the same thing Christopher did.

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 4/27/2010 8:06:00 PM

this is deep, well done,..p.d.