Juan Paolo Galua Poet Imagism

Drop

Before you cut your wrist
within a silver wink
wait-
Drop the knife!
Don't let your life
Lie at the mercy of your dripping blood
where every crimson droplet
trickles against the black mantle
of your subconscious
Making your vision
round and round
towards the spiral
of void's sinister smile
Till all is dark!
If you want to see the light
Oh please
Drop the knife...

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Kurt Kohls June 25, 2010 at 12:47 AM juan, thank you for your comment.. I really enjoyed this..dark with great imagery "towards the spiral of voids sinister smile" thats superb!! ...good stuff here...Kurt

Sharon Tideswell June 19, 2010 at 6:36 AM Wow Juan, great writing. A real attention grabbing first line, and the rest is equally as effective. Your choice of phrase is wonderful. Well done ~ Sharon :)

Michael J. Falotico June 19, 2010 at 5:46 AM you got everyones attention with this one... well written and Im glad you enjoy my work..I write from within sometimes good and sometimes not so good lol...Michael

Carolyn Devonshire April 29, 2010 at 7:18 AM Yes, we must "drop the knife" when we feel compelled to end our lives. As you say in your wonderful poem, facing our struggles is the path to "the light." Some folks really need to hear this inspirational message. Thank you for posting it. Best wishes, Carolyn

Andrea Dietrich April 28, 2010 at 8:58 PM Hey, this is pretty good, Juan. Nice to see you here. I like this poems' way of getting someone to drop the knife! Luv, andrea

Doris Culverhouse April 28, 2010 at 7:11 AM Enjoyed--very uplifting. I noticed the same thing Christopher did.

Poet Destroyer A April 27, 2010 at 8:06 PM this is deep, well done,..p.d.