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This poem is inpisred by the singer Joe Bonamassa , song; Driving towards the Daylight. Link ; https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=99rBjM0Kj40&pp=ygUVam9lIGJvbmFtYXNzYSBseXJpY3Mg

I dont really know how to upload music here on soup still so I've attached the song here. Please listen to the song, I'm really hooked on this song now. Its so touching. 

I gaze beyond the sky of sapphires, waiting for a spark of sailing light, listening to the balmy breeze~ they kiss the rays of silver, with tales of my eclipsed past. Maybe tonight dandelion wind will dance in sync~ to sunset kayaks cruising through wounded waves, shimmering amidst tear-stained dunes… I lean on the seething sea of seven sisters, to rewrite my destiny~ learning from flawed art within my aching heart. But am I the one at fault? or were you the reason we fought? I question the twirling time, passing through hues of forest haze. Was the blame in broken melodies~ strung from frail strings of my antique guitar? Maybe, somewhere down the lane of finding myself, I lost our rhythm, trying to fine-tune symphonies of frozen love. Now I’m gliding towards the moonlight away from the soulless midnight, to reach a cosy shore where I can knit quilted patterns, unraveling a place that feels like home. As I’ve been searching for an island that has no lifelines of faded vows, so I’m running from the limelight; ice green footprints, following me and our musical memories, like sinister silhouettes. I never thought that you were the one, I always knew I was the throned queen of darkness. Who will it be next, to rescript this tattooed misery? Maybe, a poet with an acrylic quill softer than the air I breathe. Now I’m gliding towards the moonlight away from the soulless midnight, to rise above the silence. I still hope that I’ll waltz through a sphere where warmth of faith flickers in colors of honeyed hope, and home will no longer be an illusion, etched on dusky feathers of diamond dreamcatchers. Someday, hourglass pearls will fall in shades of this poem I’ve woven in starry ink~ this is the unfinished story of You and I.

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Date: 1/24/2024 1:59:00 PM
Congrats ! (see SoupMail) :)
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Date: 1/24/2024 11:43:00 AM
You did really well in this contest, considering you had never heard this song before.. Congratulations on your placement..
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Date: 1/24/2024 6:21:00 AM
Back with hearty congratulations on your win. It's a great honor to share with a great poet this contest podium dear Ink.
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Date: 1/13/2024 12:13:00 PM
Great title of a very lovely poem! Have a wonderful time dear lovely Ink :-)
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Date: 1/10/2024 4:26:00 AM
This is simply, too, too mesmerising. “Maybe, a poet with an acrylic quill softer than the air I breathe”
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Ink Empress
Date: 1/10/2024 6:55:00 AM
It means alot to hear from you that. Thank you so very much truly grateful always for your poetic light
Date: 1/10/2024 1:55:00 AM
Sigh..This poem pulled my poignant heartstrings, as you've so intricately woven the shades of a melancholic love, where souls got drifted apart through the essence of time.. We forever keep spiralling in a loop of questions and miserable agony during such situations,trying to fathom, what actually deceived us..Sometimes blaming them and sometimes slipping in the abyss of self-blames.I don't know about the artist/singer,but the way you've captured the whole emotion of the song,ahh,I could feel it
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Date: 1/10/2024 2:35:00 AM
Your comments are truly appreciated dear angelic star. Thank you always for not just reading but also for feeling the depth of what i convey in my poems. Your poetic presence sparkles! Sending you light too always
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Date: 1/10/2024 1:59:00 AM
Your wordplay and metaphors really took me on a journey especially, "to sunset kayaks cruising through wounded waves", "I lean on the seething sea of seven sisters", "learning from flawed art within my aching heart", "Maybe, somewhere down the lane of finding myself,I lost our rhythm,trying to fine-tune symphonies of frozen love" This made me so emotions.. gosh.. "I never thought that you were the one", "ice green footprints" Your metaphors and imagery still shine so magically, even in this very heartfelt write. Or should I say a subliminal song? That ending particularly, took my breath... What a brilliant take for the contest too.. Sending you lots of best wishes, love and light ~ keep writing and shining, my dear Fairy Goddess!
Date: 1/10/2024 1:35:00 AM
What an inspiration. You did well with this poem and its interpretation of the song. Deserves a podium.
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Date: 1/10/2024 2:41:00 AM
Thank you so very much truly! Im grateful always for your support
Date: 1/9/2024 11:25:00 PM
Even if you were not able to upload the song, you've already described it exceptionally with the highest caliber talent you have in poetry my dear poet friend Ink. In fact, I don't know the singer and his song, but I'm loving them so much now because of your masterpiece. I love the whole poem very much, making me read over and over again playing like music in my mind. Thank you so much for sharing. I'll go search about him soon when I've more free time. Blessings and best wishes always. Hugs
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Date: 1/10/2024 2:44:00 AM
Ah dear Len you are so kind thank you so much, i didnt know the singer too but this song really did hit me. I love finding new songs and artists, and now this song is in my faves . Sending you back blessings always i am forever grateful for your poetic presence
Date: 1/9/2024 7:35:00 PM
I think this poem is brilliantly- expressed! My favorite two stanzas quite possibly are-... "I still hope that I’ll waltz through a sphere where warmth of faith flickers in colors of honeyed hope, and home will no longer be an illusion, etched on dusky feathers of diamond dreamcatchers. Someday, hourglass pearls will fall in shades of this poem I’ve woven in starry ink~ this is the unfinished story of You and I."
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Date: 1/10/2024 2:36:00 AM
Thank you so much im truly grateful for your sincere and kind feedback truly. Means alot always. To have readers like you that keeps me sharing. Thank you again. Sending you light always
Date: 1/9/2024 1:43:00 PM
You capture the essence of the song well Empress , So many great metaphors, Beautifully done
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Date: 1/10/2024 2:52:00 AM
Thank you dear Joseph, im grateful always for your support
Date: 1/9/2024 12:02:00 PM
Dear Ink, I cannot comment on the song or the artist, as I do not know about them.. Your response is a mesmerizing journey through emotions and self-discovery, artfully expressed with vivid imagery and poignant reflections.. It's a captivating exploration of introspection, heartbreak, and the quest for a sense of home and belonging. The opening lines, "I gaze beyond / the sky of sapphires," immediately draw the reader into a contemplative space,
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Date: 1/10/2024 3:09:00 AM
Your comments are as profound as your poems. You really dive deep and grasp little details of my poem, leaving me in awe understood. And seen. Thank you so very much for your poetic light and presence for which i am forever grateful for. Appreciate always your kindness. Sending you light always
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Silent One
Date: 1/9/2024 12:03:00 PM
setting the stage for a lyrical and soul-searching narrative.. closing lines beautifully capture the essence of hope and longing, expressed through the imagery of waltzing through a sphere where warmth of faith flickers in colours of honeyed hope. The metaphor of hourglass pearls falling in shades of the poem woven in starry ink adds a touch of poetic grace, leaving the reader with a sense of anticipation for the continuation of the unfinished story of "You and I."
Date: 1/9/2024 7:58:00 AM
So beautiful! I love "strung from frail strings of my antique guitar?" and the end where the sand in the hourglass seemed to be infinite.
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Date: 1/10/2024 3:10:00 AM
Thank you so very much its always good to hear from islanders. Appreciate your visit and comment
Date: 1/9/2024 7:30:00 AM
Your poem shows remarkable artistic prowess, effectively conveying the essence of the melody and reinterpreting it to a captivating work of your own, Dear Ink. I found myself singing in unison with your poetic brilliance. It is a profound realization that until the end of time, every relationship contains an unresolved tale. Your eloquence in capturing the universal theme of unresolved stories and relationships is remarkable. The hope that you have eloquently expressed strikes a chord within me.
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Date: 1/10/2024 3:11:00 AM
Ah Dr sotto, im truly grateful for your kindness and support, im grateful always that you visit and sprinkle poetic light upon my page. Thank you so much
Date: 1/9/2024 7:15:00 AM
Was the blame in broken melodies~ strung from frail strings--- Now I’m gliding towards the moonlight away from the soulless midnight -- I hear two voices in this wonderful display of emotions. You always paint your poems in lovely brushstrokes, Ink. I like the ending lines as well.
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Date: 1/10/2024 3:11:00 AM
Thank you always for your poetic presence dear vijay i appreciate your support always, and for feeling the depth of my poems so sincerely.
Date: 1/9/2024 5:31:00 AM
what a universal theme you've beautifully described--unfinished stories and unfinished relationship. Your 'Ink' style makes this poem a captivating and joyful read. I love the hope you expressed in these lines: I still hope that I’ll waltz through a sphere where warmth of faith flickers in colors of honeyed hope. Delightful imagery and flowing alliteration, too. Have a great day, hugs, Sara
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Date: 1/10/2024 3:12:00 AM
Thank you so very much dear sara for your kindness and for your sincere and poetic support. Im always grateful for your generous and heartfelt feedback
Date: 1/9/2024 5:27:00 AM
Yes, there is always an unfinished story of any relationship until the end of time on this earth. Thanks for sharing this one with us and for dropping by my page. The storm is still here but is drawing toward the end. We are no longer under a tornado threat. Sara K
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Date: 1/10/2024 3:45:00 AM
Gosh, its stormy here today too, i hope you are safe and ok. Weather seems bad in everywhere these days. Sending you light today and always
Date: 1/9/2024 12:03:00 AM
So amazing that you can listen to music and write . It’s a talent . Well done
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Date: 1/10/2024 4:02:00 AM
awwn thank you so much always
Date: 1/8/2024 11:29:00 PM
I LOVE this and the song, too. "unfinished story of you and I"-" pearls in an hourglass" no spotlight "ice green footprints" - wow, what artistry...
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Date: 1/10/2024 4:02:00 AM
Awwn thank you so very much truly im grateful
Date: 1/8/2024 11:19:00 PM
sky of sapphires,.. kiss the rays of silver, with tales of my eclipsed past… mm these lines… seething sea of seven sisters, to rewrite my destiny..the power in that line!!! Chills!!! am I the one at fault? or were you the reason we fought? Chills ..that hit soo good! I’m gliding towards the moonlight away from the soulless midnight, …u making me sing as I read this!!! home will no longer be an illusion,mm unfinished story of You and I… mic drop!mind blown! perfectly aligned with the music papi!
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Date: 1/8/2024 10:56:00 PM
Ahhh..another one of my all time favorites my beautiful soul sis! You weave true magic! The depth and grace of this piece is like you’re speaking to my heart and soul, as I leave parts of it in this exquisitely divine ink! Every line and verse speaks such volumes, feeling every word I read, like a breathtaking piece of art, my beautiful soul sis! You are truly a favorite poetess of mine, with your brilliant mind and beautiful heart and soul!
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Fading Star Silence
Date: 1/8/2024 10:57:00 PM
And I can’t even say enough you’ve truly captured the essence of this song and made it a mesmeric creation of your own! I was literally singing your lyrics along with the song! Amazing!!

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