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Drinking Dinner

tongue laps at water
sees only his reflection
gator enjoys lunch



wrote over an old Haiku
Written June 29 for Shadow's Haiku contest.

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Darlene Gifford

Date: 7/16/2015 2:59:00 PM

Hi, Richard, congrats on haiku win. I'm learning more about traditional haiku now and yours is a perfect example. I didn't know it had to be on nature only. I guess that's why my haiku flopped.

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 7/1/2015 8:48:00 PM

ahhh yes tongue in cheek like amy traditional haiku- maybe put the cut marker after line 2 [:, -- or even , are commonly used & do add the reader] YOU got it Richard if you didn't have to do 5/7/5 - which is not often done nowadays you could leave out enjoys [the only subjective word you used! - thought this is not as pretty an image as the ones above you it IS a haiku!!! GOOD one too! Light & Love

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 7/1/2015 4:34:00 AM

Wonderful winning haiku Richard! Big Congrats!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/1/2015 6:50:00 AM

Thanks Upma

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 7/1/2015 12:54:00 AM

Hi Richard, congratulations on your Traditional Haiku win. Love LINDA

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/1/2015 6:50:00 AM

Thanks Linda.

Viv Wigley

Date: 7/1/2015 12:40:00 AM

Waiter, bring me a gator Haiku. And make it snappy. Nice work, Richard, and well done. Regards, Viv

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/1/2015 6:51:00 AM

Thanks Viv.

Skat A

Date: 7/1/2015 12:12:00 AM

Richard, :) Congratulations on your win. SKAT LOVE

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/1/2015 12:39:00 AM

Thanks SKAT.

Kim Merryman

Date: 6/30/2015 8:19:00 PM

Fun haiku, Richard! Congrats on your placement in the contest! Love, Kim

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/30/2015 9:08:00 PM

Thanks Kim.:0)

Pandita Sietesantos

Date: 6/30/2015 8:01:00 PM

Hi Rick, congratulations on your fine win! Love the fine wit and imagery!! It's a 7 from me. Pandita

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/30/2015 9:08:00 PM

Thanks Pandita, hugs Rick

John Lawless

Date: 6/30/2015 7:15:00 PM

Have you been watching the animal planet again??? Snappy last line.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/30/2015 9:07:00 PM

Thanks John I wanted it to be a surprise.

Eve Roper

Date: 6/30/2015 5:02:00 PM

Rick, congratulations on your win a 7. Hugs Eve

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/30/2015 5:38:00 PM

Thanks Eve.:0)

Paul Callus

Date: 6/30/2015 4:49:00 PM

Congratulations on your fine win, Richard. This haiku reflects a faithful image! // paul

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/30/2015 5:39:00 PM

Thanks Paul.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/30/2015 1:42:00 PM

Loved this picture!! Congrats on your win.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/1/2015 12:40:00 AM

Thanks Andrea.

Shadow Hamilton

Date: 6/30/2015 1:25:00 PM

are tongues nature? not sure on that Rick your gator saved you congrats on 12th place

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/1/2015 8:11:00 AM

I reread my comment and want to add to it. It is not your responsibility as a reader to get the way I meant it but rather my responsibility to get my image across to you the reader.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/30/2015 5:38:00 PM

Personally unless it is attached to a shoe I would say the answer is yes. Thanks for choosing it even though you didn't feel it the way I meant it.

Francine Roberts

Date: 2/18/2013 4:54:00 PM

Richard , did you enter this in my contest by mistake? it is neither new nor Romantic

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/18/2013 5:00:00 PM

oops, thanks for heads up. I didn't want to enter this one in hers either.*lol*

Francine Roberts
Date: 2/18/2013 4:54:00 PM

was it actually meant for P.D.'s contest?

Holly Moore

Date: 12/15/2012 11:33:00 AM

Glad I entered! Had fun! Thanks for being on the winner's list.. Hugs, Holly

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/15/2012 11:37:00 AM

I was honored you participated. I am glad you had fun.

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 12/12/2012 9:37:00 AM

Sorry to have caused you concern re questionku...it's fun to make up new forms, I believe my comment to Linda..which I have only made one was really more about her reading 30 or so of my attempts at haiku..'attempts' almost nothing I wrote before 2012 would I call a haiku..any no disrespect to you was intended...L & L

Sara Kendrick

Date: 12/11/2012 8:08:00 AM

Of course you can be impartial...Enjoyed reading your information written in Haiku Form>>>I wanted to stop by and say thanks for the honor of being in the winners' list in your contest..I appreciate the priviledge..Sara

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/11/2012 8:13:00 AM

Your welcome Sara!

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 12/10/2012 9:27:00 PM

where is your Santa Hat??? pd

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 12/10/2012 9:26:00 PM

Richard, lol.... hurry hurry...i want winners... LOL... love the ku questions.... did you run the idea by the soup admin... waiting to see this form...pd

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/10/2012 9:51:00 PM

I sent a note but have not heard back from anyone yet. Maybe you can put in a good word for me??

Shaz Cheesman

Date: 12/10/2012 6:19:00 AM

Such the salesman Rick lol :-) Shaz

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/10/2012 11:07:00 AM

The good news is it worked.

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 12/9/2012 8:33:00 PM

Thanks for all the entries, I am so impressed with all the wonerful Poems you have submitted. It is going to be difficult to choose winners. As far as I'm concearned all the entries have been amazing. Thank you all so much. I hope to have the winners list ready by the weekend.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/9/2012 8:14:00 PM

hahaha. way to incorporate your contest into the poetry list!!! loved the last line.