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Richard Lamoureux

Drinking Dinner

tongue laps at water
sees only his reflection
gator enjoys lunch



wrote over an old Haiku
Written June 29 for Shadow's Haiku contest.

Copyright © Richard Lamoureux | Year Posted 2012

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Darlene Gifford

July 16, 2015 at 2:59 PM

Hi, Richard, congrats on haiku win. I'm learning more about traditional haiku now and yours is a perfect example. I didn't know it had to be on nature only. I guess that's why my haiku flopped.

July 1, 2015 at 8:48 PM

ahhh yes tongue in cheek like amy traditional haiku- maybe put the cut marker after line 2 [:, -- or even , are commonly used & do add the reader] YOU got it Richard if you didn't have to do 5/7/5 - which is not often done nowadays you could leave out enjoys [the only subjective word you used! - thought this is not as pretty an image as the ones above you it IS a haiku!!! GOOD one too! Light & Love

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

July 1, 2015 at 4:34 AM

Wonderful winning haiku Richard! Big Congrats!

Richard Lamoureux

July 1, 2015 at 6:50 AM

Thanks Upma

Poet Destroyer A

July 1, 2015 at 12:54 AM

Hi Richard, congratulations on your Traditional Haiku win. Love LINDA

Richard Lamoureux

July 1, 2015 at 6:50 AM

Thanks Linda.

July 1, 2015 at 12:40 AM

Waiter, bring me a gator Haiku. And make it snappy. Nice work, Richard, and well done. Regards, Viv

Richard Lamoureux

July 1, 2015 at 6:51 AM

Thanks Viv.

July 1, 2015 at 12:12 AM

Richard, :) Congratulations on your win. SKAT LOVE

Richard Lamoureux

July 1, 2015 at 12:39 AM

Thanks SKAT.

June 30, 2015 at 8:19 PM

Fun haiku, Richard! Congrats on your placement in the contest! Love, Kim

Richard Lamoureux

June 30, 2015 at 9:08 PM

Thanks Kim.:0)

Pandita Sietesantos

June 30, 2015 at 8:01 PM

Hi Rick, congratulations on your fine win! Love the fine wit and imagery!! It's a 7 from me. Pandita

Richard Lamoureux

June 30, 2015 at 9:08 PM

Thanks Pandita, hugs Rick

June 30, 2015 at 7:15 PM

Have you been watching the animal planet again??? Snappy last line.

Richard Lamoureux

June 30, 2015 at 9:07 PM

Thanks John I wanted it to be a surprise.

June 30, 2015 at 5:02 PM

Rick, congratulations on your win a 7. Hugs Eve

Richard Lamoureux

June 30, 2015 at 5:38 PM

Thanks Eve.:0)

June 30, 2015 at 4:49 PM

Congratulations on your fine win, Richard. This haiku reflects a faithful image! // paul

Richard Lamoureux

June 30, 2015 at 5:39 PM

Thanks Paul.

Andrea Dietrich

June 30, 2015 at 1:42 PM

Loved this picture!! Congrats on your win.

Richard Lamoureux

July 1, 2015 at 12:40 AM

Thanks Andrea.

Shadow Hamilton

June 30, 2015 at 1:25 PM

are tongues nature? not sure on that Rick your gator saved you congrats on 12th place

Richard Lamoureux

July 1, 2015 at 8:11 AM

I reread my comment and want to add to it. It is not your responsibility as a reader to get the way I meant it but rather my responsibility to get my image across to you the reader.

Richard Lamoureux

June 30, 2015 at 5:38 PM

Personally unless it is attached to a shoe I would say the answer is yes. Thanks for choosing it even though you didn't feel it the way I meant it.

Francine Roberts

February 18, 2013 at 4:54 PM

Richard , did you enter this in my contest by mistake? it is neither new nor Romantic

Richard Lamoureux

February 18, 2013 at 5:00 PM

oops, thanks for heads up. I didn't want to enter this one in hers either.*lol*

Francine Roberts

February 18, 2013 at 4:54 PM

was it actually meant for P.D.'s contest?

December 15, 2012 at 11:33 AM

Glad I entered! Had fun! Thanks for being on the winner's list.. Hugs, Holly

Richard Lamoureux

December 15, 2012 at 11:37 AM

I was honored you participated. I am glad you had fun.

December 12, 2012 at 9:37 AM

Sorry to have caused you concern re questionku...it's fun to make up new forms, I believe my comment to Linda..which I have only made one was really more about her reading 30 or so of my attempts at haiku..'attempts' almost nothing I wrote before 2012 would I call a haiku..any no disrespect to you was intended...L & L

December 11, 2012 at 8:08 AM

Of course you can be impartial...Enjoyed reading your information written in Haiku Form>>>I wanted to stop by and say thanks for the honor of being in the winners' list in your contest..I appreciate the priviledge..Sara

Richard Lamoureux

December 11, 2012 at 8:13 AM

Your welcome Sara!

Poet Destroyer A

December 10, 2012 at 9:27 PM

where is your Santa Hat??? pd

Poet Destroyer A

December 10, 2012 at 9:26 PM

Richard, lol.... hurry hurry...i want winners... LOL... love the ku questions.... did you run the idea by the soup admin... waiting to see this form...pd

Richard Lamoureux

December 10, 2012 at 9:51 PM

I sent a note but have not heard back from anyone yet. Maybe you can put in a good word for me??

December 10, 2012 at 6:19 AM

Such the salesman Rick lol :-) Shaz

Richard Lamoureux

December 10, 2012 at 11:07 AM

The good news is it worked.

Richard Lamoureux

December 9, 2012 at 8:33 PM

Thanks for all the entries, I am so impressed with all the wonerful Poems you have submitted. It is going to be difficult to choose winners. As far as I'm concearned all the entries have been amazing. Thank you all so much. I hope to have the winners list ready by the weekend.

Andrea Dietrich

December 9, 2012 at 8:14 PM

hahaha. way to incorporate your contest into the poetry list!!! loved the last line.

December 9, 2012 at 7:28 PM

Hi Richard, Clever way to drum up business, lol. Rollo

December 9, 2012 at 2:22 PM

Ha ha, this is very clever my friend! I love what you have done with this poem! I really enjoyed reading this ingenious piece, Great Work!!

Richard Lamoureux

December 9, 2012 at 3:40 PM

A bit of shamless self promotion*lol* Thanks for the comment and for entering my contest.

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