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Dreaming

Under the sun's first dancing rays,
The rocks were washed then varnished
And glowed like jewels set in chrome,
That beautified my dream's fancy
Paper boats hopped along the quay
And wandered off with roaming ships,
Then larger crabs in state of fear
Got washed up by a unicorn
Frightening the hard rock pools
Till paper boats drowned, out of reach
While throughout this nightmare, I cried
Deepening my futility
As I stumbled inside my head.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016

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A  Avatar
July 24, 2016 at 1:32 AM
Wonderful win, Nette...skat
Crisci Avatar
June 12, 2016 at 10:03 AM
Congratulations, Nette on your big win in Eve Roper's Second Chance contest. Deep and sorrowful verses that make any heart ache in misery. Beautiful and profound feelings expressed in every stanza. Thank you for sharing it. Best Wishes & Hugs, Andrew.
Kimathi Avatar
June 8, 2016 at 5:47 PM
Congrats Nette, for your placement with this deep poem!! ;-)
Rodrigues Avatar
June 5, 2016 at 10:43 PM
Lovely sad write! Congratulations!
Roper Avatar
June 5, 2016 at 8:38 PM
Nette, congratulations on your win! Hugs Eve
De Burca Avatar
June 5, 2016 at 8:35 PM
Very sad and emotional poem. Congrats on your win.
Scars Avatar
June 5, 2016 at 7:09 PM
Nette, a beautiful poem! congrats on your placement in the contest! :)-Luloo
Devnath  Avatar
May 24, 2016 at 1:56 PM
Excellently done my lovely friend. A +7 i feel my lovely friend. Loved always, bl
Makama Avatar
May 23, 2016 at 12:50 PM
Wow! This is awesome, awesome and so awesome. This piece is heartfelt and deeper than deep.
Teagan Avatar
May 23, 2016 at 9:25 AM
oh gosh... this is a weepy one indeed :( Awesome job with this, Nette.
Andresen Avatar
May 22, 2016 at 1:06 PM
- Heartbreaking and beautiful, Nette - Good luck in contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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