Dreaming

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Image result for woman's eyes tears

Under the sun's first dancing rays,
The rocks were washed then varnished
And glowed like jewels set in chrome,
That beautified my dream's fancy
Paper boats hopped along the quay
And wandered off with roaming ships,
Then larger crabs in state of fear
Got washed up by a unicorn
Frightening the hard rock pools
Till paper boats drowned, out of reach
While throughout this nightmare, I cried
Deepening my futility
As I stumbled inside my head.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016



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Date: 7/24/2016 1:32:00 AM
Wonderful win, Nette...skat
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Date: 6/12/2016 10:03:00 AM
Congratulations, Nette on your big win in Eve Roper's Second Chance contest. Deep and sorrowful verses that make any heart ache in misery. Beautiful and profound feelings expressed in every stanza. Thank you for sharing it. Best Wishes & Hugs, Andrew.
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Date: 6/8/2016 5:47:00 PM
Congrats Nette, for your placement with this deep poem!! ;-)
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Date: 6/5/2016 10:43:00 PM
Lovely sad write! Congratulations!
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Date: 6/5/2016 8:38:00 PM
Nette, congratulations on your win! Hugs Eve
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Date: 6/5/2016 8:35:00 PM
Very sad and emotional poem. Congrats on your win.
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Date: 6/5/2016 7:09:00 PM
Nette, a beautiful poem! congrats on your placement in the contest! :)-Luloo
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Date: 5/24/2016 1:56:00 PM
Excellently done my lovely friend. A +7 i feel my lovely friend. Loved always, bl
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Date: 5/23/2016 12:50:00 PM
Wow! This is awesome, awesome and so awesome. This piece is heartfelt and deeper than deep.
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Date: 5/23/2016 9:25:00 AM
oh gosh... this is a weepy one indeed :( Awesome job with this, Nette.
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Date: 5/22/2016 1:06:00 PM
- Heartbreaking and beautiful, Nette - Good luck in contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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