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Meter - Alternating Iambic Tetrameter / Iambic Trimeter

Rhyme - A-B / A-B

Invisible formations streak Through clouds around the Moon, Then delve beneath the canopy to voice a mortal tune. Your soul the vessel to impart In perfect tonal scheme; One second of a beating heart, A light year's span, a dream. Now as you wake in stretching moves, As night to day evolves, A messenger left vital clues To aid your will to solve. Gene Bourne. 07-20-14 .

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014




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Date: 8/6/2014 7:00:00 AM
Beautifully written - I enjoyed reading this poetic gem! Pandita
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Gene Bourne
Date: 8/6/2014 11:55:00 AM
Comments from a truly gifted writer as you, Pandita, make my day. They inspire me to compose. Thank you, my friend...Gene
Date: 8/5/2014 10:18:00 PM
Beautifully recaptured Gene. I have enjoyed this reading... Verlena
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Gene Bourne
Date: 8/6/2014 6:02:00 AM
Thanks so much, Verlena ......YF....Gene
Date: 8/5/2014 10:16:00 PM
Nice write Gene. I have enjoyed this reading... Verlena
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Gene Bourne
Date: 8/6/2014 6:07:00 AM
This is fun....answering twice. I understand the "glitch" you're having. I sincerely apprecate your comments on my poem ....Your friend from "The Magnolia State"....Gene.
Date: 7/31/2014 8:29:00 AM
This is an amazing poem Gene..Excellent indeed!!
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Gene Bourne
Date: 8/1/2014 6:37:00 PM
Hello, Charmaine...and thanks so much for your comment. I like "mixing meters" as in this poem. It seems to add a touch of drama and action to the message..... Sincerely, ....Gene.
Date: 7/20/2014 10:01:00 AM
deep poem here Gene, its nice to read a poem that gives pause for thought, silky smooth write my friend..looks like you're starting to get a following..Eileen is right about contests they open your poetry up to a larger amount of readers
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Gene Bourne
Date: 7/20/2014 8:20:00 PM
Thanks, Fred...your comments are appreciated. I do intend on participating in some contests, soon. Its taken longer than anticipated, removing poems from the "dark side" Hope your having great weekend. Your friend and fan.....Gene.
Date: 7/20/2014 3:07:00 AM
WOW! This is awesome...what a wondrous ethereal feel to it! Yes, our souls are vessels...beautiful words penned here. I can do iambic pentameter, but this...this is new to me! Is it for a contest? You will do superbly well.
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 7/20/2014 3:19:00 AM
You are very gifted, Gene. I would like to try this...sometime! Welcome to the Soup. Hope you find it a haven. We have a shared passion for words. I'll be looking more into your writes.
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Gene Bourne
Date: 7/20/2014 3:17:00 AM
Thanks Eileen...when I posted it, all the lines were garbled and out of place... so I hope you read it after I corrected it into the intended three stanzas. Mixing Tetrameter with alternating Trimeter adds an interesting texture to the flow. I appreciate your comments very much. I started on PS in Jan. and haven't entered any contests. Thanks again Your PS friend, ....Gene.