Gene Bourne Poet Rhyme

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Meter - Alternating Iambic Tetrameter / Iambic Trimeter

Rhyme - A-B / A-B

Dream Visitors

Invisible formations streak 
Through clouds around the Moon, 
Then delve beneath the canopy 
to voice a mortal tune. 

Your soul the vessel to impart
In perfect tonal scheme; 
One second of a beating heart, 
A light year's span, a dream. 

Now as you wake in stretching moves,
As night to day evolves, 
A messenger left vital clues 
To aid your will to solve. 



Gene Bourne.
07-20-14





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Pandita Sietesantos August 6, 2014 at 7:00 AM Beautifully written - I enjoyed reading this poetic gem! Pandita Gene Bourne August 6, 2014 at 11:55 AM Comments from a truly gifted writer as you, Pandita, make my day. They inspire me to compose. Thank you, my friend...Gene

Verlena S. Walker August 5, 2014 at 10:18 PM Beautifully recaptured Gene. I have enjoyed this reading... Verlena Gene Bourne August 6, 2014 at 6:02 AM Thanks so much, Verlena ......YF....Gene

Verlena S. Walker August 5, 2014 at 10:16 PM Nice write Gene. I have enjoyed this reading... Verlena Gene Bourne August 6, 2014 at 6:07 AM This is fun....answering twice. I understand the "glitch" you're having. I sincerely apprecate your comments on my poem ....Your friend from "The Magnolia State"....Gene.

Charmaine Chircop July 31, 2014 at 8:29 AM This is an amazing poem Gene..Excellent indeed!! Gene Bourne August 1, 2014 at 6:37 PM Hello, Charmaine...and thanks so much for your comment. I like "mixing meters" as in this poem. It seems to add a touch of drama and action to the message..... Sincerely, ....Gene.

Frederic Parker July 20, 2014 at 10:01 AM deep poem here Gene, its nice to read a poem that gives pause for thought, silky smooth write my friend..looks like you're starting to get a following..Eileen is right about contests they open your poetry up to a larger amount of readers Gene Bourne July 20, 2014 at 8:20 PM Thanks, Fred...your comments are appreciated. I do intend on participating in some contests, soon. Its taken longer than anticipated, removing poems from the "dark side" Hope your having great weekend. Your friend and fan.....Gene.

Eileen Manassian July 20, 2014 at 3:07 AM WOW! This is awesome...what a wondrous ethereal feel to it! Yes, our souls are vessels...beautiful words penned here. I can do iambic pentameter, but this...this is new to me! Is it for a contest? You will do superbly well. Eileen Manassian July 20, 2014 at 3:19 AM You are very gifted, Gene. I would like to try this...sometime! Welcome to the Soup. Hope you find it a haven. We have a shared passion for words. I'll be looking more into your writes. Gene Bourne July 20, 2014 at 3:17 AM Thanks Eileen...when I posted it, all the lines were garbled and out of place... so I hope you read it after I corrected it into the intended three stanzas. Mixing Tetrameter with alternating Trimeter adds an interesting texture to the flow. I appreciate your comments very much. I started on PS in Jan. and haven't entered any contests. Thanks again Your PS friend, ....Gene.