Dream

Paralysed by my surroundings Enduring the visions you hold Deep paths burned in all corners My brain is a multi track mind Anxious in sleep, beating fast Thoughts all eratic and twisted No sense a numbness no flight My body wrapped in your web Struggling to escape this fight My body overheated and sweaty Suddenly awake - such a fright!

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John Loving Iii

Date: 9/12/2012 5:53:00 PM

Running from someone?

Kenisha Shines

Date: 7/25/2012 7:59:00 AM

well written about a scary dream

Nette Onclaud

Date: 6/13/2012 12:15:00 PM

striking imagery, shazzzz... get it on!..:) huggs

Kasim Ishmael

Date: 6/11/2012 3:25:00 PM

like it chazz ;good words

Joann Grisetti

Date: 6/10/2012 8:26:00 PM

Wait until you get night sweats as well as night mares. Great portrait of a BAD dream.

Ilene Bauer

Date: 6/8/2012 4:12:00 AM

you've captured this nightmare very well here - i think we've all been there. ~ thank you so much for choosing my poem as a winner in your contest (a fun challenge!). i'm very appreciative.

Dan Kearley

Date: 6/7/2012 10:07:00 PM

This sounds all to firmilure...lol. Nice! :o)

Dan Kearley
Date: 7/12/2012 8:38:00 PM

Opps! :o)

Shaz Cheesman
Date: 6/8/2012 9:02:00 AM

afraid it is probably familiar :)

Funom Makama

Date: 6/6/2012 5:14:00 AM

This is explicitly awesome. I love the piece so much and I think I will be checking on your other wonderful works... Its a blessing coming to your page and I hope you do well to stop by too. Once again, nice work.

Robert Johnson

Date: 6/3/2012 3:29:00 PM

I can so relate to the paralizing aspect of your dream interpretation. To wake up and be able to move feels like coming up for air. It's usually my arm pinned under my body or wrapped up in the blanket. Dreams! hhhh:)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/2/2012 2:36:00 PM

I think I have had two or three of these. Good depictions of (bad) dream, Shaz!!

Richard Palmer

Date: 6/1/2012 8:48:00 PM

dream or nightmare,lol,nice write Shaz,wrote a poem that I will be dedicating to you soon,thanks for opening a thought with just one word.....

Robert A. Dufresne

Date: 6/1/2012 1:33:00 PM

whew! yeah those dreams make you glad to be awake.. well described Shaz and thank you much for your comment.

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 6/1/2012 9:09:00 AM

I have enjoyed reading your excellent writing this morning Shaz. I hope you will continue to write and share your words with us for many years to come. Have a wonderful weekend filled with joy and love. Love, Carol

Pace Ink-U-Script

Date: 6/1/2012 7:36:00 AM

Love it!!! Pure Brilliance!!!

Elliott Bowe The Drunken Poet

Date: 6/1/2012 4:14:00 AM

WOW,STUPENDOUS WRITE!!! I love the imagery here...The message is deep!!!